Any teachers want to proof read/ give any tips for my personal statement

[NotTheBlinkingGruffaloAgain]

Is it a 'no-no' to show others your PS for the risk of it being copied?
I am applying for Early years BA with Qualified teacher status...
any tips on what they're looking for in Personal statements my tutor is so wrapped up with all the statements he isn't giving me any feed back or help at all. thanks

Well I'm not going to be applying for your course so feel free to bung it over. I won't be able to help much with content - but that's very individual anyway - however I can help with how it reads, whether it's logical, clear and gets your point across, how you (unconsciously) portray yourself through language etc.

Thank you Fraktious that's kind