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Our Girl and Captain James Discussion Thread Vol V

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icemist · 24/11/2014 22:12

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Ilovelblue · 04/12/2014 22:16

I've finished my take on the stuff in episode 5 between seeing CJ in his hospital bed and then meeting up in Bath. It's nowhere near as good as pixies, but it's the best I can do. Feel free to sabotage it as you see fit. I'll add it to the Google docs thingummy as well.

Little did she know that at the other end of the phone, Captain James was also wondering how he was going to tackle the subject. Always so confident, this time he felt like a teenager about to ask a girl out on a first date. He had rehearsed his little speech over and over in his head whilst lying in his hospital bed and yet he was now terrified of making one catastrophic blunder. Four tours of Afghan and this was like almost worst mission he’d ever been on.

“You ok?” he started off tentatively.

“Yeah, Boss, it’s just that I can’t sleep properly. I was wide awake when you rang. I just want to say……….”

“Dawsie, I’m sorry……….”

They both spoke at once.

Ever the gentleman, he let her go first.

“Boss, I’m sorry I ran out on you in the hospital. I was shit scared to be honest. Just seeing you in there, knowing it was all my fault.”

“It was never your fault, never think that. And I sprang it on you, all that stuff about resigning my commission and that we could be together. It was too soon, I realise that now.”

There was silence from Molly’s end. He bit his lip apprehensively and ran his hands through his hair.

Eventually Molly spoke.

“It was all I ever wanted for months. I’ve told you all this before. I love you like I never thought I could love anyone and we’ve not even done anything yet! But you’re out of my league Boss. Do you think we could make it work? You’re posh an’ all that shit and I’m definitely not posh!”

He took a deep breath. “Molly, there’s all sorts I want to talk to you about, things about me and Rebecca and why we split up and you have to understand that my son is a big part of my life. I know I mentioned it when you came to see me but there’s a lot more to the story. But I need to talk to you face to face – they aren’t conversations to have over the phone. My doctors tell me I should be out of hospital by the end of the week and I am going to stay with my parents for the foreseeable future. I’d like to suggest I come up to London to see you but to be honest, I won’t be able to walk very far. Would you consider coming to Bath? I can sort out the rail tickets for you if you want – I know you’ve never been outside the M25 before!”

Again there was a long and drawn out silence at the other end of the phone.

All sorts of ideas were flashing through Molly’s mind.

“You’re on Boss. I can’t wait to see you and I’m sorry if I handled it badly in the hospital. Are you going to ring me when you feel up to it?”

“As soon as I can walk more than a few paces unaided, I’ll be with you, I promise. I’m having quite intensive physio but I’m still on crutches though they all seem pleased with my progress. Oh and Molly…… I’ll be counting the days, I just can’t wait to talk all this through with you!”

“Ditto.”

With that, she blew him a kiss and went back to bed to catch up on some much needed sleep for a couple of hours until the whole mad circus started up again in the Dawes household.

*
She received the call from Captain James about ten days later and he suggested meeting up at a restaurant not too far from his house near the Royal Circle because he knew he would be able to walk to it. Molly’s first thought after they had spoken was what she was going to wear? Her best clothes, pre-Army days, were hardly the sort of attire to be wearing to what sounded like a pretty upmarket restaurant. Well, she had money sitting in the bank these days, so it was time to spend some of it. She could ask Belinda to go shopping with her but since she’d never really mentioned much about Captain James, other than the fact he had been shot and she had had to treat him, that could prove an awkward conversation, especially if Dave overheard them, so after much deliberation, she decided to take herself up to the West End and have a look around. She ended up asking for the services of a personal shopper.

“What is the occasion, madam, am I allowed to ask?”

“Er, well to be honest, it’s a first date but it’s also in a fancy restaurant in Bath and I just don’t have anything even vaguely suitable.”

The woman smirked to herself knowingly. “I have just the dress.”

*
Molly woke up with butterflies not only in her stomach but they seemed to be flying around everywhere inside her. She could barely force any breakfast down. She’d never mentioned anything to her mother even after buying the dress for the date so when she was ready to go out to catch the train, Belinda just looked at her in amazement.

“Molls, you look stunning! Where on earth are you off to, done up like a dog’s dinner and so early in the day?”

“Mum, I’m meeting some of my section – they want to come up to town and we’re going for lunch. Not sure what they want to do later, maybe we’ll go to a club or a show or something, depends how long lunch lasts. Knowing that lot, they’re going to drink themselves stupid. Don’t wait up!”

Belinda watched her daughter walk down the street with a bemused look on her face and then shook her head in disbelief. The army had certainly changed Molly beyond all recognition.

*
The train from Paddington was on time and the journey passed easily. Molly spent the time reminiscing about the first time she had met Captain James and how they had set off on the wrong foot. When had she actually realised she had feelings for him? To be honest, she couldn’t quite recall because she had refused to admit it to herself for ages, having to keep everything buried deep inside but it was probably when he called her into his quarters that night to give her the words to the duet. He called her Dawsie. She hugged herself and smiled at those cherished memories.

A text bleeped on her mobile:

She chose to walk from the railway station. He had said to take a taxi but it was a lovely day and she needed to clear her head. She took in the magnificent Georgian houses and wondered which one of these belonged to his parents. It was a world away from Newham, that’s for sure.

Despite her nerves, she had dared herself to think beyond the lunch in the restaurant – well, would there be anything beyond it? Would they have to resort to a Travelodge? Even if they did, it was going to be better than behind the Indian takeaway with Smurf who had never let her forget that. She smiled to herself; that was her secret.
She saw the restaurant and pushed the door open. There he was, drumming his fingers on the table. She hadn’t even been able to picture him wearing ordinary clothes. He had always been in uniform. He saw her and stood up as she walked towards him.

“You look beautiful,” he said and leaned down to kiss her.

firegirl · 04/12/2014 22:30

ilove YES YES YES!!! That's exactly how I would have wanted that phone call to go, and exactly how I would imagine their thoughts before they met and you've filled in brilliantly about how Molly got her dress, her mum seeing her, the train tickets, everything! Bloody well done. We are getting spoilt with excellent fanfiction today.

Beingfrank · 04/12/2014 22:31

Some lovely pre-bedtime reading, thank you Iloveblue!

cjwoofwoof · 04/12/2014 22:35

OMG Ilove that was a beautiful read. I'm absolutely loving all this fanfic esp as you are writing it exactly as we diehard OG fans would want the storyline to go ie. CJ totally adoring MD and vice-versa, and yet both being afraid the other doesn't feel the same way. Well done Ilove

Richtea19 · 04/12/2014 22:35

ilove brilliant! Just how I wanted it to be!!!!! You are spoiling us as we just want more. I haven't picked up a book for over a month as I'm too busy with FanFic. Well done you!

Ilovelblue · 04/12/2014 22:36

I tell you what, in between keeping an eye on my German visitors today at work, I spent more time on this than anyone realised. I would have been severely reprimanded I think if I'd got caught but it was buzzing around in my head. Friends called in for tea on their way up to Scotland and if I am honest, I couldn't wait to get rid of them so I could finish this off. I have never done writing like this for well over 20 years. When I switched the DVD on just to check a couple of pieces of conversation, it felt really weird to see them both on screen. They'd been living in my head all day. Does that sound really soppy?

Ilovelblue · 04/12/2014 22:37

I feel a bit embarrassed, truth be told.

cjwoofwoof · 04/12/2014 22:37

I'm liking the idea CJ was a bit hasty in offering his resignation too. He MUST stay in those combats!!

Richtea19 · 04/12/2014 22:38

Not soppy at all, you are clearly very creative and when you have "stuff" in your mind you need to let it out. Sorry not put very well, I'm not the creative writer!

orphan · 04/12/2014 22:45

ilove thank you. Another great read.

richtea perhaps it's for the best that BA wasn't there if you were right up at the top of the church. I'm imagining an ear splitting scream from you and nvm to get his attention, followed by life threatening leaning over balcony, waving your tape measure and jumping up and down to jingle your stag pants bell.Xmas Smile I

orphan · 04/12/2014 22:51

ilove I think it's wonderful that CJ and Molly have inspired your creativity. Do you usually write? If not, they've really been a fantastic stimulus haven't they?

elsie3g · 04/12/2014 22:53

Don't be embarrassed iloveblue another fantastic piece. I think we've assembled a dream team of untapped storytelling talent. All those missing words are now being said. You are in the 'brilliant' section Smile

orphan · 04/12/2014 23:03

ilove oops sorry, just seen you said you haven't written like this for 20 years. It's even more wonderful then that OG has inspired you to ' put pen to paper'. Not embarrassing in the least.

apsara03 · 04/12/2014 23:06

Busy day and evening so just let catching the up. Brill Fan fics SPO, pixie n ilove great to have the gaps filled in. And like other's have said,It reads like how I imagine CJ and MD would talk/think. Well done Smile

Ilovelblue · 04/12/2014 23:07

orphan I write the occasional holiday diary and I have a couple of friends I write letters to (we refuse to do emails, we think letters are more fun to get) but mostly it's work stuff, occasional communications/newsletters and suchlike but I've never done this kind of thing for years. In fact, I've never written chapters of what could loosely be described as a novel ever, and never done it with other people either. Does it sound stupid to say I felt sort of weak and wrung out by the time I put it on here. Did our other writers feel the same? I'm just being daft.

SPOfficer · 04/12/2014 23:11

Good stuff ilove. Loved the thoughts in parenthesis. Really adds an extra dimension. I know exactly what you mean about them being in your head and how seeing them on screen feels weird. But richtea is bang on about having to get the stuff out of your head and written down. It was certainly a relief for me to get the inside of Mansfield Mikes trousers out my head!

Ilovelblue · 04/12/2014 23:15

SPO lol

pixieg1rl · 04/12/2014 23:15

It's very personal putting your writing out to people ilove, I understand exactly how you feel.

And those characters inhabit your head as you try out different permutations of the story. And than they never bleed in leave you alone.

SPOfficer · 04/12/2014 23:18

ilove no you are not being daft. Creative writing does take a lot of mental energy. You often live the emotion of your characters as you try and describe it. There is also for me an anxiousness about getting it right and a nervousness about how it might be received. You are sort of putting your thoughts and feelings out their to be scrutinised. That can be draining. Sorry sounds a bit deep and I haven't even been drinking!

cjwoofwoof · 04/12/2014 23:20

Wish I had some of ILove, pixie, CPo and the rest of you's talent with writing. Afraid if I tried it my musings would be too smutty to type...too much time would be spent concentrating on CJs trouser department and very big hands Xmas Wink

pixieg1rl · 04/12/2014 23:20

Right I've published. I'm off to bed. See you in the morning.

icemist · 04/12/2014 23:21

Thatvis wonderful ilove

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SPOfficer · 04/12/2014 23:22

I hear you pixie!

Ilovelblue · 04/12/2014 23:23

icemist I will divide it up into a couple of chapters I think and then if everyone is ok with it, you can put it out there. Is that ok? May get until tomorrow night before I can do that though - unless I wake up early again tomorrow.

Good job nobody knows me. My work colleagues would all fall about laughing.

Night all.

xx

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