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Our Girl and Captain James Discussion Thread Vol V

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icemist · 24/11/2014 22:12

Feel free to join in as we discuss all things Our Girl related

Honorary Members:
Ben Aldridge
Tony Grounds

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Richtea19 · 04/12/2014 07:45

Great contributions to the Fan Fic, it's great to wake up see you have all been so busy! Will there be any more added to the other one?

Brilliant sketch Cherin. Such authority with stag forearms crossed.

I've woken up with a massive spot on my chin (I thought I was too old for spots) so perhaps a good thing that BA won't be there tonight!

I can't remember who said it, but yes NVM would be brilliant at the FanFic, will "lure her back" ....

Ilovelblue · 04/12/2014 07:45

I do have an ending (just need to flesh it all out a bit) to this in my head so wonder if you would let me finish this (ie, that takes us up to when they meet at the restaurant) but if anyone else wants to do a different sort of finish, it's obviously fine by me. We could possibly have two or more different endings anyway if anyone else is feeling inspirational.

orphan · 04/12/2014 08:06

Morning! Absolutely love all the writing and that it's consuming your thoughts. I have this picture in my head ilove of you jack knifing out of your bed and racing to your lap top to type away madly.

cherin CJ stag holds the same place in my affections as the real CJ. (I do think he looks lonely though without the lithe Bond girl figures of richtea and myself, tape measures coquettishly in hand.)

orphan · 04/12/2014 08:08

richtea the spot is proof that CJ has flooded us all with teenage hormones!

Ilovelblue · 04/12/2014 08:29

orphan no need to jack knife out of bed to get my laptop as it has been taking up residence at the side of the bed for the last few weeks now! It's almost the last thing I see......

Will try and finish my version of the story at some point during the day but I have a couple of foreign visitors at work who will need lots of hand holding I think so it may be tonight before I can do anything. I can think of somebody's hand I would rather hold than these two, believe me!

SPOfficer · 04/12/2014 08:29

Blimey I can't keep up this morning! ilove really enjoying the story. Warming up nicely. Key telephone conversation coming up I think!

cherin · 04/12/2014 08:59

Yes yes, I like it!
See how a simple tv series (or more precisely, a tall man in uniform shouting at a little girl in uniform) unlocked all the creative juices in us lot?

So many of you can't get a calmness in your sleep...(or was is in your night? Well, same thing)

Managed to lock myself out of home already, today, I might gonna need to focus up and stay alert, RL is kind of frantic and I can't be all over the place...
(RL is frantic but this bloody bus is going like a snail...grrrrrr)

SPOfficer · 04/12/2014 09:14

Right, a little coffee break read for those of you that are so inclined. Last chapter of Our Zombie Girl. Hope you think its a fitting end to what has been a bit of a mental journey!

Chapter 5 Don't Go Breaking My Heart

James watched Molly's face warp and ripple below the surface. Her eyes were shut and a slight frown furrowed her brow. Small bubbles rose from her mouth and nose and strands of hair floated around her face.

Suddenly her eyes shot open revealing burning orbs of pure hatred. Her limbs started to thrash violently as she tried desperately to surface and her hands started to claw at James' clothes in a desperate attempt to gain some purchase.

"Don't let her come up yet" said a voice behind him.

James looked around and met Major Morleys eyes. "But I'm killing her" he cried desperately

"No Captain, you are saving her life" replied the American firmly.

James turned back to the writhing figure in the pool. Molly's face was fixed in an inhuman rictus but the thrashing was growing weaker. The burning red eyes had turned a less angry pink and, as James watched, continued to fade and take on the beautiful green he had come to love.

Yes love. The realisation hit him like a train. He almost laughed our load. It seemed as if the hidden mechanism of his private universe had clicked into place, that everything was now perfectly balanced and made sense....made sense except for some idiot shouting at him....

"Captain you need to let go of her! Shes drowning you fool let her up"

It was Major Morley who was frantically pulling on his shoulder whilst Molly's tongue was lolling out of her mouth and she had gone cross eyed.

"Oh yes, sorry" and so saying he heaved her out of the water.

Molly broke the surface in a spray of liquid and took a huge gasping breath of air.

James lifted her in his arms and climbed out of the pool. Smurf appeared with a blanket and wrapped it around them both. James knelt down, tenderly cradling Molly's head in the crook of his arm. He looked down at her beautiful face, dusted with freckles and framed by her now loose wet hair. He moved closer. She parted her lips invitingly....and then projected a stream of stinking green vomit straight into his face.

"Oh Christ!" Said James, letting go of Molly so she thudded onto the floor.

"Ah yes" said Morley "should
have mentioned that would happen. She should now make a full recovery"

Molly lifted herself onto one elbow. "Sorry sir" she said.

James smiled "No, I'm sorry for dropping you" he said and offered her his hand. She grabbed it and got shakily to her feet.

Mansfield Mike came over with another towel and a water bottle.

"Yuck" he said. "Haven't seen chunder like that since I drunk that pint of creme de menthe"

James gratefully accepted the towel and canteen and offered it to Molly who took a large swig.

"Captain" said Morley "we haven't much time. We must start rounding the zombies up before they escape from the confines of the base"

James nodded and in one fluid movement pulled off his top to reveal a perfectly toned upper body. He then strode over to the pool and lowered himself into the liquid, stretching both arms along the rim of the pool to support himself.

"Ok" he said "come and get it"

Ten minutes later he was still there with no sign of a zombie.

Kinders sidled over. "No luck yet sir?"

"No. I don't understand it" said James.

"Something better happen soon sir cos your starting to get a bit wrinkly" put in Kinders.

"I am well aware of that Corporal"

Mansfield Mike then trotted over. "Want me to have a go sir? My mam says I have the body of a sportman"

"Yep" said Brains "and you keep it under the stairs at home!"

"Thank you private" said James "but we need another solution."

"We need to do something that will get your mojo going sir, and that will let the whole base know you are here" mused Kinders.

James looked across the parade ground to a large pole supporting the powerful speakers which formed part of the base's public address system.

"Dangleberries" said James "go and grab your keyboard. Two section are going to provide the entertainment tonight"

The private grinned and doubled away into the night.

"Kinders, do you think you can look out a couple of mics and rig them up to the PA system?" Asked James

"No problem sir" replied the Corporal "Brains, Fingers with me!"

James then turned to Molly "Dawes, I am going to need your help if you are up to it"

Molly smiled "I think I can still remember the words"

They soon had the equipment set up. James looked over at Molly and smiled. She looked exactly as she had done during the first duet at the base, hair down, black vest, combat trousers. He felt his ardour rise. A swing of the mic and they were off:

"Don't go breaking my heart"

"I couldn't if I tried"

The song was carried to the four corners of the huge base via the PA system and soon the first zombies were seen shuffling into the square.

James stood in the pool waiting for them. Two section spread out around the outside and grabbed the unsuspecting attackers as they entered the solution, holding them down while the antidote took effect and singing as they worked:

"Oooooo nobody knows it,
When I was down,
I was your clown"

Soon the flow of zombies increased, familiar faces among them including Jackie and Qaseem, his normally sad eyes, glowing red circles.

James was forced to help two section in the pool as the mass of thrashing bodies threatened to overwhelm them.

"Dawes, keep singing" ordered James.

Molly looked over at dangleberries "take it away!"

He nodded and started belting out another tune.

Molly smiled and sang:

"Seems like everybody's got a price,
I wonder how they sleep at night..."

Two section fell to the task with renewed vigour and joined in the chorus whilst swaying to the music...

"Everybody look to the left (yeah)
Everybody look to the right
Can you feel that (yeah)
We're paying with love tonight
It's not about the money, money, money...."

As individuals recovered they were led away to a makeshift medical centre at the edge if the parade ground.

Among them was Major Beck, dressed inexplicably in a pink negligee and matching slippers. As he came to his senses he looked down in horror.

"Errr the zombie, in its madness, must have broken into the women's quarters and got it into its head to dress up like this...."

Kinders and Smurf looked at each other and smiled then the corporal cleared his throat and said

"Of course sir, only possible explanation"

The horizon had a pink tinge as the flow of zombies started to lessen to a trickle. Mansfield Mike had the microphone and was waving his other arm in the air:

"You're everywhere and nowhere baby, That's where you're at....."

Major Morley stood by the pool and watched as the last few zombies trail in and were dealt with. He turned to Captain James:

"We have checked all over the camp and these appear to be the last of them. You and your people have done a thorough and professional job"

In the background Mansfield Mike launched himself into the chorus:

"And its....Hi ho silver lining,
Anywhere you go now baby...."

James blinked "thank-you sir"

Morley continued "they will all require a thorough debrief and the events of tonight will need to remain highly confidential. We cannot afford for news of this to leak out."

"Of course sir" confirmed James

Morley nodded and strode away.

Molly sauntered over and smiled up at James.

"So what now sir" she asked, a cheeky smile spreading across her face.

James looked quickly around to make sure no one was near enough to hear then gazed deep into her eyes.

"I thought I had lost you tonight, I never want to feel like that again. We have a lot to talk about but this is neither the time or the place. Molly we need to wait out until we get back to Brize. Tell me you understand"

Molly nodded slowly. "I do, don't worry"

James breathed out then nodded. "Come on let's go get some scoff"

They walked slowly out of the square, past two section who were swaying along whilst Major Beck, still in the negligee, and Major Morley stood arm in arm singing with heartfelt intensity

"Ooh I've been to Georgia and California and anywhere I could run..."

Mansfield Mike turned to Kinders and said "do you think there is anything going on between those two?"

"Who, Molly and the boss?"

"No, don't be daft, them two" said Mansfield Mike nodding towards the two singing Majors

Kinders just shrugged and joined in the chorus

"But I ran out of places and friendly faces because I had to be free.

I've been to paradise but I've never been to me"

The End

pixieg1rl · 04/12/2014 09:34

BRILLIANT!

pixieg1rl · 04/12/2014 09:34

BRILLIANT!

Nickel45 · 04/12/2014 09:49

Wow SPO you rock!! You absolutely nailed it!! Love it Grin

Nickel45 · 04/12/2014 10:03

Go for it ilove. Can't wait (smile). Do we still need to do the telephone conversation, or are you covering that?

icemist · 04/12/2014 10:09

Love it SPO

Fantastic

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mummyreeds · 04/12/2014 10:20

SPO you must be totally wasted in your day job! Brilliant, nearly spit out my breakfast (not coco pops) she I reached the part with green vomit! I am now converted to zombie fiction, but only if written by you!

mummyreeds · 04/12/2014 10:21

Sorry, as, not, she! Should proof read my posts!

elsie3g · 04/12/2014 10:53

Be busy lurking and keeping up. You lot are really distracting me from RL - which isn't a bad thing.

SPO utterly brilliant!! I'm glad I'm reading at home & not on the train. It should come with a 'do not read in public places' warning! We need to get Tony Grounds to read it!

icemist · 04/12/2014 11:27

So, I have loaded the last Chapter of Our Zombie Girl and uploaded our other fan fiction too www.fanfiction.net/s/10868568/1/Waiting-Out

This is the most recent one we are writing on google docs - docs.google.com/document/d/1y3VrWo7IElJqK-2jFEJuEDUtAe7vix5sdcydlAFHWc0/edit

We can either upload it as a new chapter to 'Those Words We Needed to Hear' or a brand new story.I'm thinking as a new chapter, but an happy to go with the majority :)

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icemist · 04/12/2014 11:28

and any ideas for a profile picture on Fan Fiction ?

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icemist · 04/12/2014 11:29

elsie3g I have tweeted the link for 'Our Zombie Girl' to Tony Grounds, I wonder should I tweet the other cast members too?

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Ilovelblue · 04/12/2014 11:32

icemist - the latest chapter - just tried to get into it, and it's asking me for the owner's permission. Sure it didn't ask me for that last time. Any ideas?

icemist · 04/12/2014 11:41

was me, forgot to change the settings

docs.google.com/document/d/1y3VrWo7IElJqK-2jFEJuEDUtAe7vix5sdcydlAFHWc0/edit?usp=sharing

should work now

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icemist · 04/12/2014 11:50

just a sample of the reviews for the fiction

''This is absolutely hilarious! Have to say, when I saw the title I almost didn't read it, not wanting anything to detract from how amazing Our Girl is and turn it into something ridiculous, but this is great! Great writing and comedic timing, can't wait for the next chapter!''- Our Zombie Girl

"Hilarious and you are correct the MN thread is the funniest thing on the internet I might be brave enough to post on it soon...chapter 5 please- double away..."- Our Zombie Girl

You've done brillantly SPO

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cherin · 04/12/2014 12:00

THIS IS JUST HILARIOUS
i have just skimmed quickly because i am surrounded by colleagues and can't really fall in a fit of laughter aroudn them...but the pink neglige and the green vomit are Capital (albeit...mansfield mike drinking creme de menthe?? really?? :-)
(my mum makes an amazing version of limoncello with basil..turns out bright green...but you would not be able to drink enough of it to vomit a decent amount, it'd kill you first...)

orphan · 04/12/2014 12:12

spo what can I say? Just utter genius! Am now plunged into despair though if that's the end. You've created an addiction to OG zombie fiction. I must have more.

elsie3g · 04/12/2014 12:30

I agree with orphan we need a season 2 SPO!! Maybe HBO will pick it up as an alternative to The Walking Dead...