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What do you think to this plot? (brief)
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SineadTemptation · 10/05/2011 19:34

Jist of it is that main character was a bully at school to one girl inparticular.

She becomes an adult, has kids of her own, feels guilty about her bullying behaviour and searches for the girl she bullied on facebook. Finds her, realises she's led a pretty crap adult life and makes it her mission to help her achieve more.

Things go ok for a while but the whole thing brings back memories that the bullied girl had actually surpressed and whilst the main character focusses on helping her build some amazing life, the bullied girl is actually plotting revenge.

Very, Very early stages yet but I'm thinking it will involve adultery, theft, humiliation etc etc as well as a bit of light comedy?

Would you give it a go?

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CoteDAzur · 10/05/2011 19:40

I think that anyone seriously saying "think to" should be writing nothing else than junior school grammar exams. Sorry.

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SineadTemptation · 10/05/2011 19:46

Well, that's helpful Hmm however I'm not asking for opinions on my internet grammar. I don't tend to take that very seriously.

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belledechocchipcookie · 10/05/2011 19:48

That's an incredibly harsh post and unnecessary Cote! Hmm

It sounds good to me. Most novels have the same basic plot, they are just written in very different ways. I think you should write it, what do you have to lose? Best of luck Smile

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ninah · 10/05/2011 19:50

I quite like the victim turning on the reformed bully dynamic. If you could make them believable characters I think this could work extremely well. I'd keep it fairly simple and concentrate on the dynamic between the two individuals. You could make it really quite sinister if you wanted. Another thing to consider is whose pov you are writing from, and how far you will keep the reader in suspense ... liking it, myself

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ninah · 10/05/2011 19:52

I love a good revenge novel Smile
can't write them though. find it really hard to be understated and convincing enough

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CoteDAzur · 10/05/2011 19:59

Perhaps not "helpful" if OP only wants encouragement, but my post was definitely "necessary".

If OP is so far from the correct use of the English language as to write "think to", her aspirations of becoming a writer to do not seem realistic to me.

And seriously, if you think "most novels have the same basic plot", you can't have read many good books.

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belledechocchipcookie · 10/05/2011 20:01

She's not asking for a critique of her writing. Have you nothing better to do with your time then knock people down? Hmm

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BluddyMoFo · 10/05/2011 20:01

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SineadTemptation · 10/05/2011 20:04

Cote, you obviously take this very seriously and good luck to you - however I have no aspirations to be a bestseller author and I certainly don't vigorously check my internet posts for spelling and grammar mistakes - I save that for my creative writing, you know?! Wink

Thanks for all the helpful comments. I was thinking of writing both from the bullied and the bullied's perspective but not sure how I'd get that to work.

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SineadTemptation · 10/05/2011 20:05

oops, that was meant to say both the bully's and the bullied's perspective! ((hides from Cote))

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ninah · 10/05/2011 20:06

can't see a 'think to' in the op, am i missing something here?

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belledechocchipcookie · 10/05/2011 20:06

I'd imagine that two perspectives would be quite a challenge Sinead. I like the plot though. Smile

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belledechocchipcookie · 10/05/2011 20:07

Title ninah.

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ninah · 10/05/2011 20:07

you'd have to do the body of it in third person then I suppose

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ninah · 10/05/2011 20:08

ooops yes! Grin

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belledechocchipcookie · 10/05/2011 20:10

It's only a title, not an application for the man booker. Grin

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BluddyMoFo · 10/05/2011 20:11

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BluddyMoFo · 10/05/2011 20:11

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coffeeaddict · 10/05/2011 20:15

Why can't 'think to' be considered slang/dialect/contemporary vernacular? Perfectly acceptable to use those in literature, especially on the Man Booker list. :)

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disgustedperson · 10/05/2011 20:16

Snigger at Cote! If people judged my grammar and spelling on here they'd NEVER guess that my work has been published, performed and broadcast in the UK, Australia and Canada!

Snigger again!

OP I think it has some promise, I think you should go on with it.

Smile

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belledechocchipcookie · 10/05/2011 20:16

It's perfectly acceptable in speech. Smile

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CoteDAzur · 10/05/2011 20:23

No, "think to" in place of "think about" is not "perfectly acceptable in speech", actually.

I haven't said anything about the plot because I have a feeling that OP only wants to hear encouragement.

Anyway, have fun girls Smile

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BluddyMoFo · 10/05/2011 20:26

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CoteDAzur · 10/05/2011 20:50

So? Surely, this is the first time ever on MN that an OP got a comment that she had not asked for.

If she intends to write a book and hope to publish it, learning to speak proper English would help.

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CoteDAzur · 10/05/2011 20:50

... this is not, rather.

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