What do you think to this plot? (brief)

[SineadTemptation]

Jist of it is that main character was a bully at school to one girl inparticular.

She becomes an adult, has kids of her own, feels guilty about her bullying behaviour and searches for the girl she bullied on facebook. Finds her, realises she's led a pretty crap adult life and makes it her mission to help her achieve more.

Things go ok for a while but the whole thing brings back memories that the bullied girl had actually surpressed and whilst the main character focusses on helping her build some amazing life, the bullied girl is actually plotting revenge.

Very, Very early stages yet but I'm thinking it will involve adultery, theft, humiliation etc etc as well as a bit of light comedy?

Would you give it a go?

Cote - that's what subs do. The writer writes the story and someone else sorts out the grammar.

iPad acting up and deleting a word is hardly the clear evidence of shortcomings in mastery of English language that "What do you think to this plot?" is.

Besides, I don't intend to be a writer

'iPad is acting up. Back to junior school you shall go.

Wow, this place is harsh.

Personally I consider chatting on an internet forum to be a form of speech. I wouldn't write 'think to' as anything other than dialect, but as it's part of my dialect I would use it on a forum.

Sinead, the plot sounds interesting. Agree that it would need to written in third person. Unless you wanted to do it in the form of emails/facebook updates.
Salmon Fishing in the Yemen is a good example of a modern version of this novel form.

No, belle, there is no "is" after "iPad" in that sentence, where iPad acting up is compared to OP writing "think to". No "is" after "OP" and no "is" after "iPad".

I'd love to go back to junior school, though .

I didn't really like school, it was very boring.

Since when is "think to this plot" is "dialect" and if it is, which region of the UK is this dialect spoken? I am genuinely interested.

I like the sound of the plot.

Cote - You're not right.

Respect.

It really has to have a fantastic potential, if an editor, reads through pages upon pages of garbled English, and decides to invest time and money for a sub to clean it up.....

oh well.

Perhaps, only those of us who liked school and took learning seriously are irritated by such poor use of English coming from a wannabe writer.

OP - Most people on this thread are clearly forgiving souls, but in your place, I would not write "What do you think to my draft?" in your future e-mails to publishing houses.

Books are published without editing?
Really? Standard part of the process, I thought.

It appears that you're the only one who is seriously irritated Cote. You need to get out more

Are you feeling a bit blue today, cote?
Bit inadequate maybe?

Chin up, tomorrow's another day!

In terms of the actual plot, I think something very similar has been done by Ben Elton - 'Past Motem'. You should look at that first.

Have I confused dialect and slang? I can't tell if you're being sarcastic, the " are ambiguous.

I do need to get out more. To loud, thumping clubs where I won't offend anyone by talking at length about their mistakes

The " are hardly "ambiguous". They are quotation marks and used when quoting others. Like when I just used them to hug your "ambiguous"

Everyone makes mistakes, there's a tactful way to point them out though and telling someone they belong in primary school isn't one of them.

Dialect and slang are different. Slang is far more informal, such as 'I'm off for a slash.'

Sounds like a great story, I'd read it!

Is it "bad manners" to point out that multiplication tables are essential knowledge to someone who aspires to be a mathematician? I don't think so, but feel free to disagree.

Friends in the publishing business say that it is an extremely hostile environment, where book drafts (especially first drafts from unknown authors) are critiqued viciously and without mercy. A thick skin and the ability to bounce back from criticism having learned a few lessons are apparently very useful character traits for wannabe authors. I don't think OP is offended, but if she is, maybe this is another thing for her to reflect upon re her choice of profession.

OP probably isnt offended.
Shame, cos you've gone to a lot of effort.