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To find this BBC 500 words story deeply unsettling?

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shockedmama23 · 08/03/2024 21:14

Cellmate by Olive C.

For twelve years, this has been happening. 624 weeks ago, Cellmate was first launched. Today was my call up. Nobody knows what it is, just that everyone who comes out is changed somehow. No one speaks about it. Whether because they can't or won't, I don't know. A two-year military programme. Compulsory. All fifteen-year-old boys.

That was me. Today.

I took the bus to C.O.H.P. Centre of Human Pride. "Where strong journeys begin", they say. 'We'll see about that,' I thought. My heart was flickering fast, palms sweating like the condensation on the bus window. In I went.

There were thousands of us. Lined up in neat rows of hundreds, numbered one to one ten-thousand. And there I stood, in the midst of it all, number 4579. Gradually, guards herded us each into tens of thousands of individual cells, stacked on top of one another. The door locked. I heard a curious chirp from behind me.

I whipped round, waddling over to the cradle in the back of the room. There, a small human-replica robot lay, curled into a tiny ball, making snuffling sounds. There was a little bubble around its mouth, and it opened its big eyes. The robot smiled, it was a child's smile, completely and utterly real. A speaker in the corner of the room announced: "You may now name your child." What?!!
Humans haven't fraternized with robots for decades. They have been at war for years. So, what kind of military programme was this?

I poked the tiny thing and contemplated for a moment what to name it. Hate pooled in my head. It took me only a second. In the floating bar above the robot's cradle, I typed with quick and sharp precision: Laila. My sister's name.
The name was accepted and the hovering bar disappeared.

I stared suspiciously down at "Laila" and settled her back down in her cot cautiously. I didn't want to set off any sort of alarm they might have put on her. Hastily turning away, I paced the small room. There was a twist to this for sure. I just had to find out what. I sat on the edge of the rickety bed in the corner. And she began to cry.

Over the next 24 months, I was kept in tight isolation with Laila, feeding her, raising her. First following orders from the speaker, but then because I began to love to. She started to call me "Dadda" and I marvelled how intricate and compassionate her coding was. She was kind and courageous, never doubted herself. She grew like any human child. She began to remind me of her namesake. The girl who lost her life to the robot army. Laila.

On that final day, the speaker clicked and that rough voice announced, "your order is to kill it." A carboard box was slipped through a crack in the metal door. I rushed over and opened it with frantically shaking fingers. Inside...
Was a knife.

Honestly, it reminds me of the hitler youth caring for and then killing dogs. Just overwhelmingly disturbing, and not physically possible to be written by a 9 yr old.

OP posts:
AgentJohnson · 11/03/2024 05:20

but definitely sounds like they’ve seen Kingsman.

Not necessarily, the idea wasn’t unique to Kingsman. DD is a reader and was reading material above her age group simply because at two books a week she craved more than books in her age group could offer. I was frequently surprised by her comprehension of sophisticated themes which she came across simply by reading a lot of books.

I think the consensus here that the story must be Chat GPI generated is condescending. I personally don’t think the story is disturbing.

Squirrelwithaflute · 11/03/2024 07:10

It reminds me a little of a game called Detroit Become Human, about an uprising of androids (robots). Are they real? Do they have feelings, can they be killed if just machines? ETC brilliant game btw

YouDidntEvenAskIfSheWasThereMoriarty · 11/03/2024 13:26

Squirrelwithaflute · 11/03/2024 07:10

It reminds me a little of a game called Detroit Become Human, about an uprising of androids (robots). Are they real? Do they have feelings, can they be killed if just machines? ETC brilliant game btw

That was a brilliant game! Very cleverly done!

Thisismynewusernamedoyoulikeit · 12/03/2024 03:28

sunshinestar1986 · 11/03/2024 05:01

Lool
So many kids grow up with crazy stuff these days
My 12 year old daughter is still scared of even light horror
However a friends 8 year old son plays so much roblox amd watches so much youtube
He seems like he's a teenager
And I thought maybe he doesn't understand
But oh no he understands everything
No wonder kids are growing up with no empathy

I don't understand the relevance of this anecdote. The story shows incredible empathy and thoughtful insight into the human condition.

Something can be dark and also be compassionate. Some children aren't scared of horror and it doesn't make them worse people than your daughter.

Thisismynewusernamedoyoulikeit · 12/03/2024 03:30

@AgentJohnson consensus means an agreement of most people - I don't think most people are suggesting this was the work of chatgpt. I've not seen anyone suggest that, although I may have missed a post or two.

sunshinestar1986 · 12/03/2024 05:27

Well, I would think a 12 year old watching some horror can be normal
But an 8 year old feeling comfortable with horror usually means they were watching it far too early, which is the case here.
And maybe it's a boy thing but they talk about shooting and violence etc as if it's a joke
So kinda makes me concerned that violence is definitely glorified on tv

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