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Daily Haiku

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ChocolateButtonsOfShame · 29/01/2022 11:10

Hello!

Anyone else fancy a thread where we write and share a haiku daily?

I used to write a lot of haikus. I find they're a good mindfulness exercise 🙂

I've just started writing them again about my baby son but will try to branch out into other topics.

Here is one from last night. Distracting the boy with a toy boat while putting him in pajamas (he's a wriggler). Title in bold.

Tug Boat
A toy boat sailing
The blue ocean of your sheets
Night night tiny boy

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ChocolateButtonsOfShame · 03/02/2022 19:11

@Honourofgrayskull definitely not!

@NotInMyFrontGardenYouDont I think I'm too addicted to bread to ever quit carbs!

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Rogue1001MNer · 03/02/2022 19:23

Not all of these quite work ⬆️⬆️⬆️

It does take a bit of practice

Rogue1001MNer · 03/02/2022 19:24

Opps, over the page!
I often fail to notice
Thread longer than thought

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ChocolateButtonsOfShame · 03/02/2022 19:36

@Rogue1001MNer as in not 5,7,5?

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Rogue1001MNer · 03/02/2022 19:39

Yes, I think there were a couple posted today which aren't .
Or maybe I've counted wrong 🤷‍♀️

tigerpants800 · 03/02/2022 19:46

It is with happy hands
That he digs soil from the plant pot
And scatters over the floor

With a delighted thinking smile
That he takes the cup and pours
Water all over the house

He peels the banana himself
Now he knows he can throw the
Yellow skin all over the pavement outdoors

Strips off his nappy himself
Puts it in the bin with a grin
My baby growing up fast

Rogue1001MNer · 03/02/2022 19:49

Very sweet. Not a haiku!

ChocolateButtonsOfShame · 03/02/2022 21:13

5,7,5 is... debated. It's how haiku is taught in school. But English language writers have been deviating from it for quite a while. This is from poetry foundation (an American site):

'Despite its formal history, the haiku’s composition has expanded somewhat over time. This is due in part to the differences between the Japanese language and Western languages. In its original Japanese form, the haiku is often divided into 17 mora (a Japanese unit of syllable weight) and arranged in a single vertical line. However, in English there is no exact equivalent to the mora unit. As a result, in English and other languages, haikus are most frequently adapted into three lines of verse, usually unrhymed, composed of five, seven, and five syllables, adding up to seventeen syllables total. However, many American poets, such as Jack Kerouac, began to gradually depart from this traditional syllable and line count, in favor of depicting images as succinctly as possible'.

Some poets feel that having to stick to 5,7,5 can detract from capturing the essence of a moment, which is also what haiku is about. In my opinion some writers take paring the haiku down too far and end up conveying...well...not very much at all. Like this:

The moment
She opens her eyes
Harvest moon

I just invented that but I see quite a lot like this. What does it even mean?

However this one I posted:

Late January sun
A hawk tethered to the stump
Dreaming of mountains

I think is much better like this:

Yesterday's snow
The tethered hawk
Dreams of mountains

This is from another American site

Some Characteristics of Haiku:
An English-language haiku sometimes contains of 17 total syllables

English-language format is sometimes composed of 3 lines of 5-7-5 (syllables)

2 simple subjects are often placed in juxtaposition

These 2 subjects are often separated by punctuation

A keen or unusual observation is made by comparing the two subjects

Haiku often contains a seasonal reference
Poems are traditionally about nature or the natural world

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ChocolateButtonsOfShame · 03/02/2022 21:13

Wow that was long, I can waffle 🙂

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HunkyPunk · 03/02/2022 21:39

A little awkward
Difference of opinion.
Syllable set-to!

Honourofgrayskull · 03/02/2022 21:45

That was not waffle
ChocolateButtonsOfShame, more
Educational Grin

ChocolateButtonsOfShame · 03/02/2022 21:47

Hehe @HunkyPunk nice work. How are you pronouncing difference? 🙃

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ChocolateButtonsOfShame · 03/02/2022 21:48

And thanks @Honourofgrayskull

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mbosco · 03/02/2022 22:00

A severed tree stump
An ancient pavement bollard
My six year old grieves.

HunkyPunk · 03/02/2022 22:01

@ChocolateButtonsOfShame
Diff-rence. Definitely only 2 syllables Grin

Mysterian · 03/02/2022 22:03

My bum is itchy
But if i give it a scratch
My finger will smell

HunkyPunk · 04/02/2022 00:07

Velvety midnight,
Heralded by yowling cats.
Honour defended.

SisterRuth · 04/02/2022 00:26

Cold cold boiler died
Washing dishes feet like ice
Smiling I'm alive

frenchfancy81 · 04/02/2022 00:40

My eyes are so sore
Need to put my phone away now
Good night all of you

IamaBluebird · 04/02/2022 01:02

Sunday I’ll take a draw
Just blow the whistle
I’d love us to score. Daffodil

FawnDrench · 04/02/2022 09:28

Pitter patter rain
Mud and puddles all over
Quagmire garden - yuck.

ChocolateButtonsOfShame · 04/02/2022 11:30

@FawnDrench snow here brrrr

This made me smile @IamaBluebird good luck 😉

I love this @mbosco your 6yo sounds great.

Enjoying all the updates.

Here's another classic:

The light of a candle
is transferred to another candle—
spring twilight.

Yosa Buson, 18th C, Japan

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Honourofgrayskull · 04/02/2022 11:48

Walk along the beach
It is bloody foundering
But I am happy 😊

iklboo · 04/02/2022 11:48

Oh what a small world!
My taxi driver today
Lived in our old house

Honourofgrayskull · 04/02/2022 11:49

@Mysterian you made me laugh