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Is it just me, or is there something terribly wrong with this sentence? Well, not THIS sentence..the one in my post. Click. Go on..

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YuleLoveHekateAtSolstice · 10/12/2007 19:11

'The polls have now closed for our December Book of the Month, and after another neck-and-neck race, Agent ZigZag by Ben Macintyre won by a neck. We're aiming to get the author to come and chat to us time too, so watch this space.'

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Maidamess · 10/12/2007 19:13

Too many necks. And a typo (?) 'chat to us time too' Is that what you meant?

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TotalChaos · 10/12/2007 19:13

what's the "time" doing in the 2nd sentence. And "won by a neck" reads a bit weird too.

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TheIceQueen · 10/12/2007 19:13

now I'm no pedant, but that's just wrong - it doesn't really make sense.

Surely something along the lines of

"The polls have now closed for our December Book of the Month, and after a very close race, Agent ZigZag by Ben Macintry won by a hair's breath. We're aiming to get the author to come and chat to us some time too, so watch this space"....

ok, I know that's probably even worse - but it makes more sense to me

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NotDoingTheHousework · 10/12/2007 19:14

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Curmudgeonlett · 10/12/2007 19:14

doesn't one 'win by a nose'?

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FairyOnTopOfTheChristmasTree · 10/12/2007 19:14

IMO - the comma should be after "and" rather than "Month" in the first sentence. And the second sentence doesn't make sense. It needs something before "time".

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Tamum · 10/12/2007 19:14

Erm- the "by a neck" is redundant, and there should be a "some" before "time too", but that doesn't count as terribly wrong, so I think I am missing something....

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Curmudgeonlett · 10/12/2007 19:16

too many metaphors too

Polls = polling station

neck and neck race = horseracing

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PaulaYatesbiggestfan · 10/12/2007 19:16

i thought a comma never preceded 'and'

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YuleLoveHekateAtSolstice · 10/12/2007 19:16

Yes Tamum. You are missing the Pedant gene.

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80sMum · 10/12/2007 19:18

Should be:
"The polls have now closed for our December Book of the Month and, after a very close race, Agent ZigZag by Ben Macintry won. We're aiming to get the author to come and chat to us some time too, so watch this space"....

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TenLordsaLapin · 10/12/2007 19:19

'The polls have now closed for our December Book of the Month, comma and needed after another neck-and-neck race, Agent ZigZag by Ben Macintyre won by a neck a what?!. We're aiming to get the author to come and chat to us time ?? too, so watch this space.'

Maybe Justine wrote it after the Meetup