I've posted before and received some very helpful advice regarding DDs writing. Despite doing well she has always found the mechanics of writing hard and recently became upset again that the very high achieving DCs in her class can write so much more quickly than her.
As she has continued to dislike writing at home I haven't pushed her to practice but I finally encouraged her to write a story again. I was so pleased because I think her handwriting has come on wonderfully, she wrote the second piece in about half the time of the first and it's got a good chunk more words but takes less room.
Whilst the mechanics of her writing is markedly better, I am wondering if this story is at a lower 'level' than the first because it has less interesting openings and quite a few short sentences / sentences beginning with 'and' and some missing / incorrect punctuation.
Am I correct to see it that way and if the mechanics are now sorted to encourage DD to spend a little time working on interesting sentences and expanding them?
Photos 1 and 2 should be of the first story, 3 of the second.
Here's the story if you can't /don't have time to view photos, spelling punctuation as written:
The escape of Patch the bunny
Once upon a lovely time there lived a bunny who was owned by a little girl named Emily and she was a good girl. One lovely morning Emily had finished feeding her bunny Patch but she had left the door open. So what Patch did was to go out of the door! On her jouney she hopped on a piece of metal and it made a big BANG! Now, there was a fox sleeping in the wood and the sound woke him. He was feeling hungry. "I wonder what that sound was" said the fox. And came out of the wood. The fox saw the bunny and growled "grrrr". The bunny said "eek". But the owner came looking for Patch. She found Patch and said to the fox "shoo away silly fox" and the fox ran away. Emily ran home with Patch in her arms. She put her back in her cage. "I have lernt that I should always shut the cage door" said Emily.
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writingblues · 27/06/2014 12:38
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