I'll have a look.
I've read through mine, here's a summary:
Para 1: What I had done since leaving school (work for me, mostly, but you could include raising family, etc. I had a sentence mentioning that I?d spent time travelling.)
Para 2: How this led me to decide on a new career in nursing
Para 3: Looking forward to nursing and learning new skills; applying skills learnt in current job (childcare) to nursing; what I?ve enjoyed in recent study (e.g. Access course, relevant evening course); learning about my strengths and weaknesses and acting upon that; what?s been a challenge.
Para 4: Why I picked adult/child etc nursing; what interests me and why I think that pathway would suit me; how I investigated this (shadowing, working as HCA, talking to nurses in this field)
Para 5: Things not on NMAS form; interests etc. A short paragraph on mine, I?m very dull.
Para 6: Closing: looking forward to nursing, confident I will enjoy it.
I made several allusions to patient care, further study, that I was open minded in my approach, working as a team member etc.
Now I?ve read it again (I wrote it some time ago) I sound great. They will think me mature, confident and intelligent; possessing finely-honed communicative skills, the ability to shoulder weighty responsibility and make decisions of far-reaching consequence; a team player who is popular, caring and helpful.
They must never find out what I?m really like.