Any German speakers around please?

[justforthisnewname]

Thanks. My daughter has a short German assessment where the children have to write a short prepared passage. She has done this but grammatically does not know if it is correct as the teacher was absent yesterday so she had no one to ask. Would anyone mind casting an eye over this very short piece and let me know if it contains errors as she is just going to be learning the errors for the test otherwise. Thanks very much.

I can take a look if you like.

I could have a look, too.

Thank you Bluebirdbook and Prokupatuscrakedatus. Your review was so helpful - she is learning her piece now. Thanks so much.