I?m reading Carole storms the CS now, which is one I really like, but there are several bits that make me go 
and feel that a good editor should have picked them up. I like the basic book; it has everything a good CS book should have: Blizzard, accident, nice rescuing doctor who gets engaged, Joey interfering, people knowing random parent and an accident which sorts Grizel out (for the time being).
This is a bit long though
Firstly the expectation of Miss A that Carola would have thought about worrying, not her cousin who was the one who would miss her, but her parents. My experience of my dc is that when they?re on a prank then there is no thought of worrying me. They may well be upset afterwards, but at the time no way do they think of my worry. Her parents haven?t seen her for so long I doubt she had any concern that they would know about it at all. It?s obviously meant to add up into a character that ?doesn?t think? but actually she does an awful lot of thinking and planning just to run away to school. But that is just normal for that age to me. She thought for the bits that mattered to her, she didn?t think of someone she hadn?t seen for 5 years, and wasn?t expecting to see for another 3-4 years.
I mean she?d even managed to find which day the train was going to school on. That must have needed a bit of research.
Secondly we have an awful lot of open mouth shock on things that I?d have thought quite explainable: ?She had never expected to be asked her age so soon?. I doubt she?d thought about it; Clem is shocked when her name isn?t read out in assembly-surely at that age they?d have said ?oops admin again. We?ll go and tell them afterwards.? Particularly as they?d also failed to find her peg in the Splasheries.
I?d have also expected that Miss A would also have assumed that it was an admin error not that Carola knew she wasn?t entered. Even Biddy, judging by the conversation with Joey, would have assumed that.
Hilary saying ?We?ve got a certain amount of rearranging for this new kid.? I?m not sure what. She?s in a fairly standard form, there?s space for her. What needs doing other than the telegrams at that point? Any idea?
She arrives after hours in her dormitory to find all her stuff (2 trunks? worth) unpacked. Yet her dorm is talking about ?any idea where the new girl is? in the morning. Surely they would have noticed that the curtains were drawn on the ?empty? cubicle or that her things had been unpacked there-it must have been unpacked for her when the girls were in because there wouldn?t have been time before.
Then ?We better concentrate on the botany and leave the maths out? 
Naturally as she hasn?t done much. I suppose it saves on giving extra help. Just imagine Ofsted?s reaction to that!
Slightly strange is that she has to do some ?urgent calculating? to work out her year of birth. Would have expected her to know it at 14yo, but maybe not.
I find it very strange that her dad (who presumably has a job to do) and not the mum (who by all likelihood doesn?t) comes to see her. Surely they?d both have wanted to see her, and, as the reason the mum gave for going with dad and not staying with Carola was that he was hopeless on his own, she?d have wanted to. He then acts amazed that she?s ?nearly 15yo? when told. I can imagine him being amazed at seeing her and how much she?d changed, but not on hearing the age. Neglectful parents!
On the basis how many new girls haven?t read the prospectus the wide eyed astonishment that Carola (particularly as she doesn?t have the uniform) wears thin very quickly, repeated several times. The same goes for most of the books from then onwards though!
And I wouldn?t expect someone who?d only been at the school less than half a term to understand a history lesson in German. Heck, I doubt I would have understood one in French when I?d done 5 years of it. 
Then we have despite having spent some time at Joey?s house, she apparently doesn?t recognise it at all-not even when Daisy comes out with Bruno. Daisy then accuses Carola of ?running away to school?, which isn?t reacted upon by the girl with her, not even asked about later.
One that makes me is when Peggy Bettany says they?ve been rationed jam (one desert spoon for a fortnight) so Matron can give jam to the fair. It reminds me of another Matron. The one in Thursday?s Child (Noel Streatfield) who saves the orphans? food to take to her sister.
Something that irritated in a lot of children?s books is when a character says ?we must be careful of X (which they?ve done for years) because this might happen?, and then it does. They have this with the cotton wool. They?ve used cotton wool for the dip always and it?s this year when Miss A suggests it?s too flammable and this year when it?s set on fire.
There?s also a hint that EBD is thinking on putting Biddy as the next interfering bossy character. She says ?maybe I?m inheriting Jo?s mantle?.she was a champion butter-in.? But it never goes further than that. Was it something that EBD tried out and decided it wouldn?t work, or did OOAOML just push her way to the front? Who knows.