Is this poem any good?

[Hmmthanks]

A wanted man

All I wanted
Was to be
Wanted
Quite as much
As I wanted, want, am
Wanting.
But I was left
Waiting, my woozy
Wanderings
Wasting hasty into a dull numb.
Heavy heart
Hotly wanting, a wont
of mine smoothed
by your surging slippery
Wantlessness:
Woman, unwanted,
Wan smile on my face.
Flushing hotly, burning royally;
Wet streaming, screaming.
I won’t, I will not!
Wall-eyed I wallow deadly,
While warmly, wetly you glisten:
A wolfish well-heeled warning
on a wintry day.

Ni

My son sent that not me.

I don’t really get it?

I like the first half. The second half seems like you're trying a bit too hard.

Bit of a whiny winge. Sorry.

Cheers, I literally just wrote it on my phone. I had a bad break up a while ago and trying to verbalise things! Makes sense to me but I am extremely sleep deprived ha

No.

I don't like it for the following reasons:

It has too much alliteration.

It doesn't really make sense.

The punctuation is somewhat eccentric.

The language is pretentious.

I don't think so but English literature is not my area so I would not claim any expertise beyond being a reader.

Really bad. I hope that he didn't write it himself? Is he alright generally? Maybe he sent it to you not realising what it was about?

Apologies, I posted my response before seeing that you were the author, OP. That doesn't change my opinion but I would have expressed it more tactfully had I known .

No I really don’t mind! I’m actually a decent writer when I put my mind to it. It’s more cathartic just to get words on a page really. I’m very jet lagged and in a funny mood and just needed to write!

As a cathartic exercise? Hopefully.

As fun? Hopefully.

As literature? No, sorry

Its piss poor if you were wanting it published. It is ok, but nothing more, it is a way for you to express your thoughts after a break up

If you found it cathartic then others' opinions don't matter, OP - it has fulfilled a purpose. I hope you soon start to come to terms with your painful break up, and apologies again for expressing my criticism with all the subtlety of a sledgehammer.

No absolutely accepted. I was a published writer in a former life but never poetry, prose was more my domain. Just needed to get something out

From an English major and someone who has done endless poetry workshops, it has potential. Like most poetry, it could do with a lot of editing. Also the alliteration is a bit much, especially at the end, all the W words seem forced. Could use some concrete images as well.

I don't think anyone's going to be reading it aloud at funerals in 100 years time.

Hmmm, I actually like it. Obviously in the minority

Thanks for the constructive criticism - bit bemused by the seemingly gratuitous insults though?

Too many Ws and the way it's set out offends my need for order - but poetry is a personal thing. I can hate it while critics might rave, and vice versa.

I have a masters in creative writing, OP, and poetry was always the bit I really really hated! I love reading it, but writing it? The world is not ready 😂

I rather liked it.

Too many W's and not a great flow iyswim
But each to their own

At least he tried

Nasty posters😡