CLEVER PEOPLE REQUIRED>>>>>>>>>>CV help

[castrolgtx]

Dp has just come in and asked me to "do him a cv"
He;s come up with this personnal statement, can anybody make it sound good, there seem to be too many I's in it
I am a conscientious, hard working individual with an eye for detail, am a punctual, reliable
person who thrives under pressure - I enjoy working to, and meeting deadlines.
I am an understanding and easily approachable person who is always willing to learn.
I also enjoy life and am always ready for a challenge.
I can interact with all types of personalities on both a professional and a personnel level.
I have excellent communication skills both verbal and written, and have high expectations of
my work and always work to a high standard.
I am a happy father of two young boys and I have a good sense of humour.
I can work on my own initiative, as well as part of a team.

In my opinion you can never 'butt' yourself up providing you can back all of the 'I's up with a statement.

The CV has to talk about you, not your previous manager etc.

Should have said, let him put it in, but be able to back up every part of it:-

I am conscientious, how?

I am flexible. How?

IYNWIM

You know what, I just want to go to bed, but I said I would help!!

I think my first message should have said, you can never butt yourself 'up' enough providing you can provide evidence of that skill.

Depends what sort of job he is after, but if you call yourself hardworking, give an example.

ie) you were a lumber jack in Canada for a while.

Not really, more like you were working on a project that involved teamwork and you all put in that extra hour.

Gosh I am a bit long in the tooth.

He is a builder, going for foreman type job

Ok, so he needs to be able to communicate with people and I expect that we both know the sort of people he needs to communicate with.

Castrol have you got the CAT facility because I can't write this off the top of my head.

Hello
Sorry didn't come back, had a bit of an argument and told him to do it himself!!!

He is confusing the personal statement with key skills. He needs to drop all the "I's" - too arrogant and repetetive. Also drop the personaol father bit. Other bits are a bit vague like 'i enjoy life'. Doesn't sound professional/work related enough

I would do the following

Name
Adress etc

A conscientious, hard working XXXXX (EG HR Professional) with an eye for detail who thrives under pressure. (then a bit about the years experience and types of industries - beef it up a bit)

KEY SKILLS

@ Ability to communicate at all levels
@ Excellent communication skills both verbal and written
@ Capable of working on my own initiative, as well as part of a team
@ Ability of working under pressure to meet tight deadlines