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Please re-phrase this for me...

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LaLaLaLayla · 07/09/2011 10:49

It's for my DH who is hoping to fulfill a lifelong dream of working in the logistics industry (yeah, I know Grin). I am working on his Covering Letter and I need to put this better:

"Logistics is something that has always fascinated me. I also have a keen interest in commercial aviation and geography".

I am usually good at this stuff, but am suffering from writer's block. Can you help me please? Ta.

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LaLaLaLayla · 07/09/2011 11:12

Please?

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LovelyCuppa · 07/09/2011 11:18

Does he really? Tbh the line "Logistics is something that has always fascinated me" would make me do this face -> Hmm then this one -> Grin as I fell about laughing. It doesn't actually mean anything.

The covering letter needs to explain why he's a good fit for the job. How do his skills meet the job requirements? Yes by all means say that he finds the work interesting but don't pretend it's akin to a monastic vocation because it'll sound like bull shit.

LaLaLaLayla · 07/09/2011 12:15

don't pretend it's akin to a monastic vocation because it'll sound like bull shit.

Erm, you haven't met my DH Grin. Good point though Cuppa, I appreciate you being honest. I think maybe "I am now looking to move into the Logistics Industry" should cover it, non?

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LovelyCuppa · 07/09/2011 12:26

Add a because and reasons why to it and it'll be grand. I don't know a huge amount about logistics but it's basically getting someone or something from A to B. So skills like problem solving, knowledge of transport systems etc etc would be relevant I'd have thought?

Glad you weren't offended. I was a touch blunt Grin

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