What do you think to my personal profile (for CV)?

[threefeethighandrising]

I'm writing a CV as I'm after a particular job.
After many goes, here's what I've got for my personal profile.
What do you think?

"With several years? web, marketing and administration experience, I am an extremely competent, capable and reliable employee. Friendly, intelligent and level-headed, I am a supportive team member who is comfortable with managing a varied and demanding workload.

I am currently undertaking a Digital Media BA as a mature student and looking for web-related part-time or freelance work in [my area]."

Good or corporate twaddle?

Any advice appreciated!

TIA

anyone?

I think it looks a bit impersonal, sort of like you are quoting the job advert back. Can you add any achievements/ examples to back up what you say? I know it's only your profile so you wouldn't want to go into too much detail but something to make it stand out.
I used to be in recruitment for a big firm and had loads of profiles all very similar along the same lines.

Thanks roundandroundincircles. Fair comment!
I've put a lot of work into the CV and I've run out of steam a bit now I think!

I've included achievements in the CV already, but I'll have a think about how to change this bit,

I think it reads well. What level of job are you looking for? Because capable, reliable, friendly, level-headed, team-player, comfortable are the key words that reach me, rather than extremely competent, intelligent and demanding workload. Which is your key message? If you're going for the former, then I think it's fine.

Hi cornflakegirl thanks for your thoughts I appreciate it.

It's a web / marketing assistant role that I'm over qualified for but really want (I'll enjoy the work and the conditions are perfect).

My key message is employ me! Only joking.

What I'm trying to get over is that I can do the job with my eyes shut but it's the kind of thing I really enjoy and they'd be crazy not to employ me. Does it say that to you?

Yeah, my thought was that it sounded like you were going for something like an executive PA role, but I didn't see how that fitted with the web-related thing. So yes, I think it's just right.

Have you thought about how to explain in your covering letter or CV why you are applying for a job that you're over-qualified for?

I've said in my letter that it would compliment my studies well, which is true. However it's also because of the conditions (part-time, just for the summer). I didn't think I'd find anything web-related on those terms, so if I don't get this I'll probably end up doing something marketing / admin based as that's what's available on a temp basis round here. I'd much rather work with the web though. I'll explain that (hopefully more eloquently!) at interview.

Does this sound any better by the way? (Think I might be just fiddling now!)

"With several years? web, marketing and administration experience, I am an extremely competent, capable and reliable employee. Friendly, intelligent and level-headed, I am a supportive team member and enthusiastic about working with the web.

I am currently undertaking a Digital Media BA as a mature student and looking for web-related part-time or freelance work in East Sussex."

Ah, if it's a temp job, probably not so much of an issue anyway - in fact, overqualified could work in your favour if it means that you'll pick everything up really quickly.

I prefer the first version of your profile.

Thanks cornflake girl

Time to stop fiddling and send it off I think!

Let us know how you get on!

It's quite generic, is the thing that leaps out at me. it's not targetted to the role you're applying for.

"several years? web, marketing and administration experience"

web experience are you a website designer or a developer, implement the backend databases, or do you do web copywriting, or do you just maintain the content?

marketing - do you mean online marketing, as in SEO or conversion rate optimisation and management of paid budget?

administration - you mean as in a PA, secretary skills, minute taking, etc?

Tailor, tailor, tailor, to each application you're submitting, is my advice.

I'm not sure what kind of job you're wanting to apply for based on that wording.

And I speak as an employee who works in a marketing dept (traditional), my brother runs his own SEO agency (internet / digital marketing) and my DH is a programmer. So despite being familiar with the skills you're talking about, I don't know the scope of your skills for the target job, IYSWIM.

Oh yes meant to quote the last bit too: "looking for web-related part-time or freelance work" - you should be saying that you're looking to gain experience in something which meets the target's organisation.

E.g. if you're applying to get some part time work in Amazon's search engine optimisation team, say you want experience at the cutting edge of technoloy... something about competition.. world leader.

Or if you're applying to your local 5-man band web development agency, say you want experience in a tight-knit environment where you can contribute + hit the ground running.

I don't have time to give more examples because my laptop is dying, but i hope that illustrates the earlier comments about it being quite "general"...

Thanks for your help everyone. I agree it did sound very generic! I tried to make it a bit more human. all done and dusted now, so fingers crossed