Which writing techniques are used in these two sentences?

[SweetMarmalade]

Just looking at some past review papers of Ds, he didn’t answer these correctly. Can anyone help?

Q1. Which writing technique is used here: “His fingers shook slightly”?
Out of all the techniques I can find I can only think of descriptive?

Q2. Which two writing techniques are used here: “McInturf coughed, once, twice; a hideous, gurgling, strangling sound”?

Any help greatly appreciated.

Well... no corrections isn't terribly helpful!

He’s due review 2 next week so we’ll see how that goes Parent’s Evening not long after so we’ll have a good talk then. It could be that Ds needed to correct the paper, will find out more when I have a chat to the teacher.

Sorry @Piggywaspushed, I didn't mean to make you hyperventilate so alarmingly.

Marmalade my year 10 had a look and said 'why on earth would we have to analyse that shit'

@lostinleaves can’t tell you how happy that makes me 🤣

@sweetmarmalade I'm glad I've made somebody happy as I fear that I may have tipped poor @Piggywaspushed over the SPAG cliff

Most times in my son's school they do "green for growth" which is where they correct things in green pen so you see what you should have written, ie the actual answer.

Otherwise how will they improve?

Not inspired, my year 6 DD has already lost so much love for English thanks to KS2 'death by grammar'. Gone are the days she writes stories for fun..

I'm convinced this obsession with technical writing & grammar has taken focus away from comprehension & creative expression which doesn't feel very sensible nor helpful as a path to GCSE/ A level.

I teach English and those are weird questions!

I'd also see the first one as a good example of showing not telling, which I do teach as a technique.

I'm OK, lost. I bounced at the bottom and have climbed back up again...

I think you are perhaps Tigger and not Piglet then Piggy

Perhaps! Although I feel more like Eeyore these days...

That's not nice...I was becoming very Eeyore ish until I changed jobs.

The OCR A Level examiners' report last year commented rather wearily on the overuse of technical terminology which added nothing of substance to the candidates' responses...

As did the AQA GCSE report.