Would someone be willing to level this piece of writing for me?

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DD is 6 and will shortly be starting year 2. This piece was written on her own after reading a book about Alfie, by the writer/illustrator, Shirley Hughes. I've reproduced exact spellings and punctuation. There was no adult input. Thank you.

Alfei is always in a mood.
This is what Alfie looks like when he is cross or angry. [drawings attached].
This is what Alfiel looks like when he is happy or proud. When it is raining it makes Afie angrea and he kicks pudls about.
Somtimes just sometims, Alfie is cheaky, one he put a wet flanl on mums soup. Alfie gose to hony hop play school. he is three yers old. Alief has got three more months in play school. he's not very good at writing but he is good at dowing jigsaws.

Alfie's big brother Jedd likes to play dominos [dominos copied from a game]. Jedd loves his cudly alain [alien] called blobby. his fovrit food is pizza. he loves big cats.

Aliefs pet fish are called Tom and Jerry. He calld them that becase they look like Tom ad Jerry, but they are very lazzy. there a fish calld roseiy.

Anyrose is Alief's little sister. She thinks all of Alfes jokes are funny. Anyrose alwas gose out in the pram. Sometimes mum says do you want to get out. Anyrose says no she is only one. When she wants food she lies on the floor like a chicken. Anyrose can get very angry. But Alief can make her happy agen. Anyrose gets up at six o clock in the monring. no wonder she always want's to nap.

There are another couple of paragraphs in this vein. The writing is mostly print, very neat and small, with some attempt at joining some words. I would be grateful for any feedback, and any tips on how we can help her to build on this. She loves to write and is keen to develop her skills. Thanks you.

I'm not a teacher but I think that's brilliant. My best guess at a level, and as I said, I'm not an expert, would be high level 2. This is based on the fact that it is better than dd2 (just 6) could do, who is currently 2C and not as good as DD1 (8) would produce, who is currently 3A.

I would say 1a/2c. I'm not a teacher though, just going by what DS (same age) got on his report and it seems about the same standard. I really don't think it's a high 2a. Some capital letters and other punctuation missing and not many connectives or flow to the writing. I did post on here last month with 2examples of his independent writing done at school and got a variety of levels from 1a to 2a! But as I say not a teacher so definitely no expert!

I am a teacher albeit wrong key stage, i'm much more used to level 3 plus....
But, our grids track back to l2 and i would say that's where it sits, lower to middle. It's a really good quantity of writing for her age with good commentary on the book - but it's a string of simple sentences for the most part, more connectives required (starting with and, but, because). The sentence beginning sometimes, just sometimes is technically the best, better structure and use of commas.
Great for the start of y2!

very difficult without seeing it written, but good 2c to 2b is perhaps a reasonable approximation. reasons for thinking this are: Sentence structure is simple (mostly not extended). spelling is good, using high frequency words correctly. punctuation is mostly correct (simple). Awareness of appostrophe.

next steps would be to look at adjectives. We play the 2As game, anywhere and everywhere, a bot like I Spy. See a (noun) thing, what kind of a (noun), double it.... a swimming pool, deep swimming pool, deep blue swimming pool. Great for descriptive writing.

Also swapping sentences games, perhaps with rhyming - start with something like "the cat sat on the mat" and swap one word at a time.

A third (final) idea, asking questions. Again make it a silly fun game. Lots of versions around. Find question marks, exclamation marks and speech marks when you're reading (but absolutely not during the bedtime story ).
Most of all have fun with words and don't stress about levels, they're going, going, and will be GONE in the next couple of years!!

Just out of interest this is an example one teacher on MN gave me of an externally moderated piece if level 2b work:

On a ink black night, in a jet black street was a dark, dark house. In the dark, dark down a spiral staircase lived two skelletons and a little dog skelleton. "What shall we do tonight?" askted the little skelleton,
"I know we can go to the park!" shouted the big skelleton. So they set off down the jet black street to the park. When they got there they didnot expect there to be a merrygo round and a very big slide. "Is that what I think it is?"
"Yes it's a meddy evil fair!"
"Let's go on the skelleton cups, then on the big slide...let's go!"
When they got off they were dizzy!
"Let's go home" suggested the big skelleton so they set off back down the jet black street.

Why bother with levelling? If she loves writing, let her write. Get her some notebooks and some writing paper and envelopes and an assortment of pins and pencils and let her get on with it!

Oh, and get her a junior dictionary and show her how to use it. Don't fixate on spellings, but make sure she knows how to find them out is she wants to.

Alluc Isn't that from Funnybones? Or am I being dim as years since I read those books to little children...

Here. This website has levelled examples of fiction and non fiction writing.
www.jmes.co.uk/WritingSamples.aspx

Mignonette - I have no idea it was just an example of writing from Mrz that she said one of her pupils had done! Possibly was based on a book though.

Yes I imagine she was inspired by it. They often are (speaking as a 70's pupil who submitted a poem out of an annual at age 8, won a prize and had to admit I had plagiarised ).

Completely not answering your question, but I love "Anyrose" (expect to see it cropping up on the Baby Names board any time now...)

" Possibly was based on a book though."

Yes he wrote the story after attending a drama workshop (based on the book Funnybones).

The OPs daughter's story is also based on a book/s Shirley Hughes The Alfie and Annie Rose stories.

Thanks for the comments everyone. Quite pleased to hear that levels are going, no more worries on that score anyway! I like the suggestions about games to increase use of adjectives. What else can we do to sport DD with developing her sentence structure and vocabulary? Is it something that will automatically improve if we read a lot, and practice?

If there's anything guaranteed, in my experience, to stop a child being interested in and self motivated about something like story writing, it's parents trying to encourage and support and improve and suggest.

Just read to her loads and loads, and make sure she has time and space and materials for her writing. And, as my mother used to say to me when I tried to get too involved in one of my children's activities "Curlew- don't interrupt!"

Your daughter is automatically picking up language and pattern from what she reads and is read to her, the evidence is in her Alfie piece just continue the good work.