I feel so chuffed at these emails - Boast/Preen/Glow/Crow!!! (Of course he could just be doing damage limitation as they cocked up)
Part 1
Impressive work - I'm in admiration of your cover and graphics - very attractive. I think your idea of putting the assessment criteria as a heading is good too. As I read section 1 can clearly see the background to your organisation and role. From the title and the end of the final paragraph I can deduce that the context of the WBA will be addressing a suitable management structure. So I reckon the marks are secure for this section.
Will you send me the next section as soon as you have produced it, please? I'll then check it in the same way and confirm back to you that I can sse where you have covered the assessment criteria. Obviously the clearer you can make the coverage of the criteria the better, since this reduces the guessing factor on my part!
Part 2
Thanks for the second part of your WBA. As per my earlier email today, this also reads well and I can see how you are addressing the three criteria in this section. The next section may be a bit more testing, because you are moving from describing things to analysing and eventually proposing courses of acton. But as before, please press on and send me the next section. I didn't word count the first section, but this one is about 300 words. You'll see far more marks are tied up in sections 3-5 and this may inform the number of words needed to cover each section adequately.
I'll look forward to section 3 with great interest
Part 3
This is progressing [i] amazingly quickly and [ii] impressively accurately. You are clearly on the crest of a wave with this. Your style of expressing the criteria at the top of the page and then following their sequence as you produce the text makes it very straightforward to follow your line of though [and thus to accurately assess].
The comprehensive appendices are compelling in illustrating how the assessment criteria are covered and will generate the discretionary marks. In spite of what I said yesterday, you have very successfully made the change from describing things to analysing and presenting options.
This will turn out to be a very successful WBA,K - a testimony to your quickly developed skills in WBA writing. M could rent out your talents!
I'll look forward to the next section with heightened interest.