Come and criticise my new business advert

[Eddas]

I am going to start up my own bookkeeping business. I have written a flyer and need some opinions on it please. Feel free to criticise it, suggest improvements

I have an outlet for the flyers(DH works in a plumbing merchants) and will probably make up some business cards at some point. I may even put cards in local shop windows.

I would advertise in a local paper or something but I don't have any money to do that so I thought flyers was a cheap way to start things off I am hoping that I can get work through word of mouth too once I get going.

Thanks for any advice

So, here it is...........

Jane Smith Bookkeeping Services

SAVE £££££££££££££££ ON HIGH ACCOUNTANCY FEES

• Bookkeeping
• Secretarial services
• VAT
• Small PAYE
• Sole traders/Partnerships/Small Limited companies

All the above services can be supplied weekly, monthly, quarterly or yearly
depending on YOUR needs

I am AAT qualified and have over 10 years experience working for a local
Chartered Accountancy firm

Please contact me to discuss your individual needs

Telephone/text : 01234 567899
Email : [email protected]

I think you should take your phone number off the internet so click on the RED !!!!! in the box with your name and ask MNTowers to edit your post

DUHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH stupid me

I realsie what you have doen with your number

10 years' experience (ie, add apostrophe)

RTKangaDYSONMummy my names' not Jane Smith either

policywonk, have never been good with apostrophies(sorry if that's not spelt right) thank you

LOL

I was shocked to see your phonre number that I didn't read it properly

Eddas, I don't know a lot about these things so feel free to ignore my comments
I don't like the £££££ or the your in capitals - just makes the advert, which sounds really professional seem a little less professional iyswim. If this is common in these sorts of adverts though, then it's fine.
The other thing I was going to suggest was using an email address other than your hotmail one if you can. (I assume you'd be using the address I have?). It would look a bit more professional, and you wouldn't be relying on a free email account.
Other than that, I'd use you!

thanks SPB, so replace £££££££££ with Money? and just say your?

I was going to set up a different email address, just for the bookkeeping so that things don't get lost amounst the other stuff I get sent. How do I go about setting up one other than hotmail? [thicko]

Eddas

1. Get a free phone number 0800 or 0845 that way you can take calls at home or on your mobile which is helpful if you are a one man band. I used www.uk2numbers.co.uk. I have it diverted to home number then get BT to divert it on to my mobile if it rings for more than 15 seconds.
2. Set up a very simple website (one page) with this and a good photo on it (it can just be a stock photo it doesn't have to be you!) - it will cost virtually nothing if you DIY or about £400 if you get someone to do it for you I use www.1and1.co.uk for my website hosting and e-mail - they are cheap and reliable.
3. The above will give you a 'proper' e-mail address so you can be www.janesmithbookkeeper.com and be email [email protected] or whatever
4. join a local BNI or other business networking organisation as you'll get loads of business that way www.bni-europe.com

oh and good luck

Words sound fine to me. When you print it out, avoid putting lots of pictures and different colours in. The most professional looking fliers are usually the fairly simple looking ones,

oh I should also say I have found BNI useful for the expertise of people there as well - I have a copywriter giving me advice on wording, I get my business insurances sorted as there is a specialist in the group, there is a PC guy a web guy etc etc - its a bit like having a buddy group if you get a good set of people!

fym, thank you for all the advice. I might think about all of that a bit later on. TBH I was just wanting to start off small as I really don't want it to cost anything as I can't afford it to.

gooseyloosey, I may add a small picture but it will be black and white as i'll photocopy it.

it's quite scary really!

oh most of it doesn't cost anything!

the phone number was £9.95 one off fee and the web address is a few quid a year....

You can visit BNI for free as well!

you might want to try your chamber of commerce as they help with new businesses....

also try www.vistaprint.com as they do lots of free printing offers....