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An (ultimately) heartwarming tale for Easter : The Unvanishing Boy

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silence1969 · 16/04/2017 08:16

Hope you enjoy!

betateacherblog.wordpress.com/2017/04/07/the-unvanishing-boy/

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silence1969 · 16/04/2017 15:53

"Lots of" Livia? It was about the comfort of a single friendship.

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LiviaDrusillaAugusta · 16/04/2017 16:01

Okay - it was hard to work through the flowery language I may have lost the will to live, somewhat ironically and I was busy trying to work out the relevance to Easter.

If you are going to link to your writing efforts, you need to be able to take criticism though and not just say that those who aren't falling over themselves to compliment you don't get it

silence1969 · 16/04/2017 17:52

Thanks Livia. You're right - anyone who writes or paints or creates wants to hear the best things about their work. Anything less can make them prickly. I've been rejected as a writer plenty of times, so am growing a thicker skin. If people don't get it, then I guess I try harder :)

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Sweets101 · 16/04/2017 17:59

Well i liked it. I didn't find the wording "flowery"
I thought it was quite a straight forward message.

silence1969 · 16/04/2017 18:10

Thanks Sweets101 - that was what I was aiming for :/

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LiviaDrusillaAugusta · 16/04/2017 19:19

Why do you think people don't 'get it'. It's possible to understand something without enjoying it.

I write too so I know about creating things but I wouldn't start a thread to link to it as I would think that others who aren't into the same things would appreciate it - and pushing it at people by bumping the thread will always wind some people up.

MyNewBearTotoro · 16/04/2017 19:47

I quite liked the story but I hate how it jolted out of the story to preach a confused message from the author at the end. I felt like this story was a beginning and a muddle but had no clear end and that was made a lot worse by the 'morale' at the end.

silence1969 · 16/04/2017 20:08

Originally delivered as an assembly. Hence preachy tone at the close. Perhaps I should have cut that bit off. Apologies- sounds like a feeble excuse, I know...

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LiviaDrusillaAugusta · 16/04/2017 20:16

Students in an assembly are a very different audience to the posters on MN.

I don't think that promoting your blog is generally good form on here either.

For what age students was it written? I'm guessing late primary?

pardrej · 16/04/2017 20:25

[hides thread] Hmm

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