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Would this get you hooked?

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everyonehasanovelinthem · 16/11/2008 14:15

As a teenager you dream about your 18th birthday. The day you finally become an adult. The liberation attached to magically entering the grown up world, where finally you can legally drink alcohol, legitimately get into clubs and if you are really lucky, get your first credit card.

The reality for most is a 'surprise' party, that you already know about, some presents that you don't really want and the burden of responsibility that finally comes knocking when you realise you are old enough to have to pay council tax...

What one doesn't envisage is being kidnapped. Or should that be adult napped? Either way, it is an unwished-for turn of events. And, also an extreme reaction and punishment, one would think, for the crime of sleeping with your best friends boyfriend.

Aimed at mid 20 + market. It is about a mid 30's woman, who is relfecting on her unstable youth , and contrasting it to her current situation.

Criticism welcome!

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NotQuiteCockney · 16/11/2008 14:46

Is this meant to be the opening bit? Or is it meant to be a back page blurb?

If it's meant to be real writing, then you really want to just talk about specifics, not 'you', or the reality 'for most'. Keep it specific, to keep it interesting.

Litchick · 16/11/2008 17:05

Agree wit NQC.
How about changing the POV to first?
I'd always dreamed of turning 18, you know, the ...
Then the reader is immediately introduced to the narrator.

ResultsMayVary · 16/04/2026 06:43

Ooops sorry just saw the date

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