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Can anyone help with some rhyming words?

5 replies

Rhymingrooster · 21/02/2023 17:37

I need the second and forth lines to rhyme but accidentally wrote some of the verses with the first two and second two rhyming. I didn’t realize I’d made the switch until I read it through!

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Smoothlines · 21/02/2023 17:47

We need more to go on here!

Rhymingrooster · 21/02/2023 17:53

Here are the two verses:

Paints a picture, hunts for bugs,
Looks at ladybirds, snails and slugs.
He loves to colour in and draw,
Sticks his pictures up on the door.

At home we like to play together,
In the playhouse, whatever the weather.
Splash in puddles, pick up leaves,
Play hide and seek behind the trees.

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PlumpkinPete · 21/02/2023 21:20

Can't you just swap the lines?
I think it reads fine as

Paints a picture, hunts for bugs,
He loves to colour in and draw,
Looks at ladybirds, snails and slugs.
Sticks his pictures up on the door.

[Although I think "pictures upon the door" or " pictures on the door" scans better]

At home we like to play together,
Splash in puddles, pick up leaves,
In the playhouse, whatever the weather
Play hide and seek behind the trees.

[Perhaps change playhouse to garden so that it makes sense for trees to be there, but I think that's true of the original as well!]

Grammarnut · 22/02/2023 18:38

Alternate the rhyming lines into ab,ab as PlumpkinPete suggests. Works well esp if the suggestion for 'Sticks his pictures up on the door' is followed, so it scans better.

ColonelSpondleClagnut · 22/02/2023 18:40

I would also change to
In the garden, any weather
as I think it scans better 🤷🏻‍♀️

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