Hi everyone. I have an idea for a novel and have quite a detailed story but would like an honest review of my writing style. Please excuse any grammatical errors - It's mainly the style / language I would appreciate feed back on at the moment:
Dali Bird had been known as many things. A nobody, a somebody, a has been, a has not, a wished he was, a wished he wasn’t, a go-getter, jet setter, self-starter and borderline drunk. All of these afflictions were experienced in moderation you understand and in most parts peppered with ambition and a quiet confidence. He was the hopes, dreams and everything in-betweens for a thousand men from different worlds. He spent a lifetime reaching for the stars before finishing up with the moon on a stick. His most gratified role (by his own admission) was becoming a father – my father as luck or chance or whatever you believe in would have it. It feels fitting my story is started with him, as was I. My name is Cissie Bird and I am the water poet’s daughter.
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teddyandmo · 21/09/2018 13:35
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