Meet the Other Phone. Protection built in.

Meet the Other Phone.
Protection built in.

Buy now

Please or to access all these features

What we're reading

Find your new favourite book or recommend one on our Book forum.

Post apocolyptic reads

259 replies

BlingLoving · 24/04/2012 09:38

I love a good post apocolyptic/sci fi read but find it's quite hard to find them so I'm looking for inspiration please from all of you. To give you an idea of what I like I recently read and enjoyed the Hunger Games trilogy. Going further back, I love almost everything John Wyndham ever wrote, but The Day of the Triffids and The Chrysalids are my favourite.

My Kindle is charged and I am ready to download...!

OP posts:
AnyFucker · 18/06/2012 17:02

hehe, I hope we have managed to give a little push-ette, sgb Smile

FirCough · 18/06/2012 19:10

OK, constructive criticism here. It's promising with a slightly Wyndhamesque feel to it so far, but it needs a lot of work.

Your first paragraph failed to grip me at all, and had I read it anywhere else I wouldn't have read on. You need to come up with a much more arresting opening sentence:

Maybe it's because my life was, by most people's standards, fairly shit that I still have it.

You're on the right lines, but I read that and wondered what "it" was going to be. Didn't immediately cotton on that the narrator meant 'I survived'. No, you can do a lot better than that.

It's far too wordy: we don't need to know every detail of every item of food in the cupboard, or every garment the narrator washes, wears or packs. People soon tire of reading lists.

Avoid Americanisms - the story is not set in the USA. I misunderstood this sentence:
I got up and made for the bathroom, snagging my old blue robe on the way and pulling it on against the morning's chill.

I thought that the robe had caught on the doorknob and assumed the narrator was already wearing it. This is clearer and more concise:
I got up and made for the bathroom, pulling on my old blue robe against the morning's chill.

You don't have to describe every single action, it just bogs everything down and stops the story from moving on briskly. Some of the sentences are way too long and need breaking up too, otherwise the reader loses the sense.

But it's a draft and should be pretty good after a ruthless pruning! :) Hope you don't mind me sticking my oar in. Blush

SkinnyVanillaLatte · 18/06/2012 20:20

Enjoyed that too solidgoldbrass.I went through excitement and fear.I really want to have more of the events unfolded to me,so I have a better idea of the crisis that's going in.It's definitely reeling me in.

When you're rich and famous, remember us!

PomBearWithAnOFRS · 18/06/2012 20:57

I had a couple of vague "that word is wrong" thoughts - my inner nerd can't help herself, but honestly solid - I have found myself thinking about your characters in odd moments all day, and wondering what they're doing/what is happening to them - they are alive for me and that is just wonderful. It's the mark of a good read for me - I care what happens to Mikey and his mum. And even the little girl on the motorbike, and the singer... Compared to some of the dross I've paid good money for, even the little snippet you've given us here is a million times better. If nothing else, you can bloody punctuate and that's more than some of the turkeys among the self published Kindle books on Amazon!

solidgoldbrass · 18/06/2012 21:08

It's definitely still at the 'draft' stage so no offence taken at criticisms. I always like to get the bulk of the book down and then go back and revise (one reason my first drafts get a bit wordy is so I don't forget important points...)
Once I've got established on the writers' forum thingy I'll post a link rather than keep filling up MN's bandwidth.

Pombear: I find them alive too, I think about them a lot (more so than some characters I made up for other books), and when I was first writing it I gave myself nightmares with that 'playground' scene...

frenchfancy · 18/06/2012 21:09

More please solid.

I agree it needs some editing, but that doesn't change the fact that it is good.

solidgoldbrass · 18/06/2012 22:07

Here's Chapter Three. I think the rest of it probably needs a bit more beating into shape before I show it to folks...

The first thing we heard was the baby crying, that awful, desperate, shatteringly loud sound of a baby communicating major distress. Then, over it, came a woman's voice, shouting 'Help! Anyone there! Somebody help! Help us!' My arms tightened on Mikey but at least he didn't wake, I'd thought before he could probably sleep through an earthquake. It was Deb who leapt to her feet and took a few hurried steps towards the bottom of the T, where the noise was coming from.
'Fucking shit!' she muttered, then to me,' Put the kid in the buggy, quick!' I could see what she meant ? that we might have to run ? but at the same time I was frozen with panic. But then the woman came into sight, past the other entrance to the precinct, where the big Marks and Spencer was, and she wasn't running or behaving like someone who was being chased, but stumbling almost dazedly, looking around and shouting at the top of her voice.
She was probably pretty if scrubbed up nicely; youngish, reasonably slim, with a lot of curly red hair. Right now, though, wearing nothing but a scruffy nightie and a scruffier towelling robe, clutching the still-howling baby to her and with her face streaked with dirt and what was almost certainly blood, she wasn't going to win any prizes.
She spotted us around the same time we spotted her, and came to a hesitant stop, bending her head to the baby and trying to hush it. With one eye still on her, I lowered my sleeping boy into his buggy and did up the straps, just in case.
'We're harmless,' Deb called out to her. 'Are you? Are they coming after you?'
'No,' the woman said. 'No no, he's not after me. I've killed him. Poor Nicky, I've killed him,' and then she started crying, as well.

Her name was Joanna Finton-Scott, her ten-month-old daughter was Rosemary, and she wasn't actually entirely sure she'd killed her husband, but she'd hit him hard enough that he wasn't moving when she'd left their house. She hadn't been chased, she didn't think so anyway, and there had certainly been no one after her by the time she'd crossed the bridge at the end of Twilsdon Park, but there had been noises from the other houses when she ran from hers, crashes and screaming, so she'd headed straight here thinking there would be people who could help, and only started yelling herself when she saw the shops were all closed.
We got this much out of her in the first few minutes, during which we sat her down and Deb pretty much forced her to take a couple of swallows from the bottle of Jack Daniels. Joanna had a cut lip and her nose had been bleeding, but she was more upset about the fact that Rosemary's nappy and little pink sleepsuit were soaked with pee. She didn't seem aware of the state her bare feet were in after her panicked journey this far.

While Deb gently pressed her for more details, I went back into the minimarket and got a pack of nappies in Rosemary's size, plus a couple of jars of baby food. The damn place didn't stock baby clothes, or footwear, but one of Mikey's t-shirts would do the poor little sod for the moment. I dithered for a moment as to whether to take the buggy in with me, but somehow I had already accepted, deep down, that Deb was to be trusted, and Mikey didn't wake during my rapid foraging.
Joanna accepted both nappies and t-shirt with tearful gratitude, and insisted on seeing to Rosemary and changing her before she'd let us clean her own face up a bit, for which my packet of wipes came in useful.
She thanked me again for the baby food, but said that Rosemary wasn't used to it, and unbuttoned her nightie to feed the baby herself. While Rosemary fed, she told us a bit more of her story, and though Deb nodded understandingly through most of it, I kept quiet, trying to absorb how much I'd missed of what had been happening recently. She'd come from the upmarket estate at the other side of the park, a gated development of about a hundred or more households, where they had a very active neighbourhood watch type group. In the last few weeks, there had been talk about dividing it into a men's group and a women's group, and though neither she nor her husband had been wild about the idea, he'd gone along to a couple of the men-only meetings on the grounds that he'd have to know about it to object to it. But he hadn't wanted to talk about what went on when he came home, and Joanna had been preoccupied with Rosemary having a cold, and worrying about her job at the end of her maternity leave. The news had been getting worse all over, rumours of a nasty virus, of violent gangs roaming the streets, and other stuff only hinted at. Then some of the neighbours got ill, and one man apparently went mad and killed his wife and children. A few of the other neighbours loaded their families into their cars and just left.
'Well, you know, last Thursday,' Joanna said. 'Some of the news reports were saying head to your nearest assembly point if you've got any strange symptoms, some were saying everyone stay home and stay calm...'
Deb looked at me, and I looked away; Joanna, absorbed in reliving her experience, didn't appear to notice.
'Nicky went and bought a load of bottled water and tins, he went with Paul and Harley and their wives and they all said that there was nothing like as many people as you'd expect stocking up, which is weird when you think about it. But we agreed we'd stay put for the time being, things would probably settle down.'
Rosemary, not seeming to mind the fact that she was almost swamped in a bright blue t-shirt printed with helicopters, had fallen asleep against her mother's breast. Joanna looked at her lovingly for a moment and adjusted her nightie. Then her lips trembled and she struggled not to cry as she carried on.
'We were all right until this morning We'd been having a bit of a lie in as Nicky wasn't going to work. Then I got up and went to the bathroom, and when I came out, Nicky was on the landing and he just came at me and started hitting me. I ? I managed to kick him in the balls, but he got up and came after me again. Rosemary was screaming in her cot and he took no notice of her at all, he was just all over me, I ran back into the bedroom to get to her and... and I grabbed the little lamp off the table and hit him with it. It was like it woke him up for a moment, he said 'Jo, run! Take Rosie and get out quick!' And then his face changed and he was roaring at me and hitting out, I was kicking and punching him and I knocked him backwards into the dressing table, he whacked his head on it and fell down, so I just grabbed Rosemary... He wasn't moving. I was trying to find a pair of shoes but I couldn't see them, and then I heard all this screaming from next door and I just lost it, I ran down the stairs and across into the park. And there was no one around, no one anywhere. And then I found you two.'
Silence fell. Deb picked up the Jack Daniels and took a drink from it, but didn't offer it around.
'Right.' she said. 'We need to get ourselves a bit sorted out now.'
She got up and went across to the charity shop, which was closed, lights off, but didn't have anything in the way of shutters or grilles. She peered inside for a few minutes, hands up to the glass and gazing through them. 'Brilliant. OK, that's great. There's a pushchair in there.'
Joanna and I watched her, both of us equally bemused as she pulled a roll of banknotes out of her pocket, examined it and shrugged. She turned back to us with a wry grin. 'I'd feel bad about ripping off a charity shop, but I'll stick some of this on the counter ? just in case.'
Then she went to the nearest bin, lugged out its metal inner container and rammed it hard through the shop's big window. Mikey and Rosemary woke up at this and began to howl, Deb shook her head, used the metal bin to clear some big shards of glass and clambered into the shop.
'Is she nuts?' I said, even though I had started to accept that pretty much all the normal rules had gone by the board today. Joanna, rocking her screaming daughter, looked up at me and tightened her lips.
'I don't care, she can help us,' was what she said, and then Deb was thrusting an unfolded and rather grubby looking stroller out through the broken glass.
'Oi, Joanna!' she called. 'What size are your feet?'
'Fives' Joanna replied, standing up, Rosemary's cries tapering off as her mother jiggled her gently, murmuring to her. I picked Mikey up as well but sat back down on the bench with him to soothe him, trying to avoid getting too many thumps from his flailing little fists, so I missed whatever negotiations Joanna and Deb had been engaging in. By the time I'd thought of giving Mikey Bida to cuddle and Bida had worked its usual eight-legged magic on him, Joanna had got Rosemary strapped in the stroller and Deb was re-emerging from the shattered window with a lurid straw beachbag rammed with garments in one hand, and a pair of green wellies in the other.
'There is fuck all there apart from stilettos in a five, girl,' she was saying to Jo. 'But I've grabbed all the kids' clothes, and something for you, too.'
They both came back to where I was sitting just as Mikey closed his eyes again.
'Right,' Deb said again. 'We'll go back to mine in a minute. I've got triple locks and bars on the windows, so we'll all be safe enough in there for now, while we work out what to do next. As long as the power's not been cut, we can go online and find out where it's all at. Can either of you cook much, by the way?'
The question was no more or less incongruous than anything else that was happening, but somehow it made me want to laugh, particularly as Joanna said 'A bit,' just as I said 'Yeah, a bit.'
The upshot of this was me making my third and final trip round the minimarket, this time with Mikey in his buggy, filling a wire basket with meat, pasta and vegetables and various tins. With an internal shrug, I threw in a couple of bottles of the best red wine they had and then, with a half-guilty impulse, peeled off two of my banknotes and pushed them under a corner of the locked till.
I almost carted the whole lot out in the basket, but then I saw the pile of cotton eco-shoppers and spent another minute or two transferring my haul to a couple of these on the grounds that they'd be easier to hang off the buggy.
When I emerged, Deb was gently wheeling Rosemary to and fro. Before I could panic about Joanna, she re-appeared from the other arm of the T, in powder-blue tracksuit bottoms, what appeared to be a man's grey and white striped shirt and the wellies. She'd obviously braved the loos to change, or at least nipped into one of the accessible doorways down there. She had her nightie and robe in a bundle, which she tossed into the bin Deb hadn't used as a ramraiding tool.
Deb was clearly relieved to have us all in view again.
'Time to move on, I think,' she said. 'Kizzy, you want to grab any of that picnic stuff? Joanna, you hungry?'
Joanna shuddered. 'No. Really, no, let's get out.' She hurried across to Rosemary's stroller and took the handles from Deb while I scooped up the debris from the lunch, everything but the stripped chicken carcass, which I slung into the bin and the last beer, which Deb picked up and opened, and bundled it into the shopping compartment under Mikey's buggy. He was still asleep, Bida clutched tightly in his lap, but I knew he would be wide awake fairly soon, and wondered briefly how kid-friendly Deb's home might be. I was beginning to feel a nasty creeping unease again, and I had the impression the other two were of a similar mind.
OK, so we were burglars and shoplifters even though we had put some money down in the shops from which we'd met our needs, but it wasn't just that. I suppose it was the noise Deb had made breaking through that huge glass window, but whether it was that no one had come along to investigate, or that someone would come along any minute that was worrying me, I couldn't honestly say. I flashed back in my mind to the playground between the towers of Midwell Heights, and that sensation of being watched by hostile eyes, and needed no more urging at all.
We went down the stem of the T, the way Joanna had come, and turned along the line of lesser shops. On the other side of the road, the primary school and the rows of office buildings were all equally, obviously unoccupied. We were moving at a steady pace, Joanna and I both with buggies and bags ? she had taken charge of whatever else Deb had looted. Deb herself had nothing heavier than the beer she was swigging from, but at least she wasn't haring off without us.
We were almost at the traffic lights ? still functioning, I noticed, even without traffic to instruct ? when a car appeared out of a sidestreet and turned towards us, not speeding but not dawdling either.
'Oh fuck,' Deb breathed and then glanced from Jo to me and hissed furiously, 'Don't say a word, either of you. Let me handle it.'
That was fine by me, particularly as Mikey chose that moment to wake up and demand a drink, and Joanna seemed equally happy to let Deb handle things. The car pulled over while I was dealing with Mikey, and the man in the passenger seat got out, holding a clipboard. The driver, who was much bigger, took a little longer to emerge. When I saw that they were both wearing yellow hi-vis waistcoats with Real World scrawled across the front in marker pen, I felt shivers go down my spine. This was mainly due to having another moment of being convinced I was having a very long, very lucid dream, but that if these two were the emissaries of my uncoonscious, what I was going to wake up to wasn't going to be all that good.
Clipboard Man, who looked like any amiable slight nerd, with thinning ginger hair, jacket on over a white shirt, and glasses, tried a friendly smile.
'Well ladies, are you making your way to a pick-up point?' he asked.
'We're fine, thanks. ' Deb said. Joanna bent down and fiddled with the straps on Rosemary's buggy, I think checking that her daughter was strapped in tightly enough to cope if we were going to run.
'We have a pick-up point on London Road,' the man said, still smiling. 'It's probably better for you if you make your way there. We could give you a lift.'
'What, with the children and the buggies? Have you got car seats?' Joanna demanded, and though Deb looked appalled I could see Jo's point instantly. We were three adult women with two small kids in the most basic of strollers, the car that these men were driving was your bog standard suburban vehicle, without room for all of us.
'Shut up, cunt,' the driver said, stepping round the front of the car. I grabbed the handles of Mikey's buggy, bracing myself to run, suddenly flashing back to the man in the playground the day before. That same weird grating voice, that same slow heavy stepping... The other man, the clipboard wielder, swung round and looked at his mate with genuine alarm. 'It's OK, Nelson,' he said. It's OK, they can walk there if I give them directions. They will do, they know it's for the best.'
'Yes ,yeah, we'll get there by ourselves,' Deb volunteered. Rosemary had woken up too and begun to kick and yelp,softly but definitely demanding some attention.
'Cunts!' Nelson said again, and made a kind of stumbling rush at the lot of us. It was Joanna who moved the fastest: she swivelled the buggy round away from him and did a kind of sideways kick at his knee. It didn't work and his hands came up and grabbed her leg, and he flung her down on the pavement. Somehow the buggy tipped over and fell on its side, and Rosemary's screams of terror and pain added to the whole mayhem. Deb jumped in with her hands locked together and landed a good hard hammer punch to the back of his neck, and he fell, but he fell onto Joanna's legs., grabbing at her, ripping at her shirt. Clipboard dropped his clipboard and danced about on the spot, shouting 'No, no, no!' Mikey was shouting 'No, no!' as well,and I thought of just wheelying the buggy and running like I had done when I saw the dead woman in the garden, but then Joanna kicked Nelson off, and the sun came out from the clouds and beamed sudden bright rays over the street and Nelson went into convulsions. He'd rolled over on his back and he started roaring and thrashing and jerking, and the other man, the clipboard wielder, rushed over and knelt down beside him. Joanna had scrambled to her feet and dived for Rosemary, hauling the buggy upright and and and making vague patting soothing gestures. Deb glanced from her to me and said, 'Move on up, let's go, let's go right now,come on.' We hurried after her, not in desperate flight but shifting quickly, despite the kids screaming and raging in the buggies, and when we reached the next junction we were just about to make a smart right turn and go on. I risked one look back and saw Nelson bucking where he had fallen and suddenly releasing the most amazing jet of red vomit, his feet drumming on the road.
'Bida, mummy, BIDA!'
Mikey's yells suddenly penetrated my brain, not the fact of his screaming but the content, and I came to an instant stop, realising that he'd lost his beloved toy. I looked round and saw it, about ten feet away from the men who'd intercepted us.
'No,' Deb snapped as she saw me stop. 'No, girl, no, come on!'
'No. NO!' I shouted back at her. 'Look after Mikey,' and I thrust the buggy, burdened with my son and the stuff we'd looted, practically into her crotch and ran back the way we'd come. At the time all I could think was that Mikey wanted Bida and I couldn't bear to deprive him; it was only a bit later on that it sank in, why I stupidly ran back to get a manky, battered, pointless cuddly toy. Bida was home, safety, our normal quiet lives, and Mikey had lost his home and his father and his grandparents and his comfy cot and I wasn't going to let him lose anything else.
It wasn't actually very far, we hadn't got very far away, but going any closer to Nelson's dying than I had to was not much fun. Yes, Nelson was dying ? he vomited another massive glut of blood when I was almost within touching distance. Bida, a bright splat of orange fabric, lay in the middle of the pavement, limbs sprawled out like a blighted drawing of a sun. Clipboard saw me, or became aware of me, and turned properly round, getting to his feet from the crouch he'd been in. 'I just want Bida,' I babbled, 'Bida's Mikey's , he needs him.' I made a grab at the thing and fumbled, grabbed again and got it by one rotten orange leg. Nelson groaned, and started slamming his head into the pavement; Clipboard focussed on me. He was splattered with blood, not too badly, but not all of it was Nelson's. 'This is all absolutely fucked,' he said, quite calmly. 'All of it. Absolutely fucked.' And then he turned his back, shaking his head. I had Bida, so I turned and ran, seeing that Joanna was well ahead with Rosemary and Deb was pushing Mikey's buggy further away slowly, turning round every step or two to look for me. Mikey was yelling for me as well, I covered those last few steps faster than an Olympic runner, and then I was back with them, my hand on the buggy handle.
'I should have shot you, but no one ever does that,' Deb observed, relinquishing the buggy to me as I gave Bida back to Mikey and and got moving. I wasn't really listening to her words, more the tone of them, which was friendly concern rather than threat.
We caught up with Joanna fairly quickly, she had stopped at the next turning, unsure of whether to bolt off into the random future or wait and see if we were still with her.
'It's fine, it really is this way,' said Deb, and a few minutes and a couple more junctions later, we were at her place.
It was the basement of a late Victorian semi, and she'd not been lying about the window bars, or the locks ? it took her a couple of minutes of swearing and key-counting to get the lot of us inside. Getting the buggies, particularly laden as they were, down the dogleg of steps, was no fun either. However, once we were in, I felt a huge sense of relief. Deb's flat had electricity, as proved by the fact that a light was on in the front room, and it was reasonably clean and comfortable. One large room, that same front room, opened off the hallway, with a big squashy sofa and small table, a desk with a computer on and bookshelves piled high with books. I could see a kitchen through an archway, and another couple of rooms on the other side.
We hauled some of the furniture around and turned the coffee table on its side and managed to make a kind of pen for the kids. Joanna propped Rosemary up on some cushions and Mikey, who was used to babies after our year of well meaning church hall groups, was happy to show her his trains or play with them himself. Joanna and I flopped on the sofa and both of us looked up at Deb.
'This is more than just us,' said Joanna, bluntly. 'It's more than just Twilsdon, or even London, isn't it?'
Deb pulled the bottle of whisky out of her coat pocket and took a swig.' Yup. Don't know how far it's got, though She had sat down in the computer chair, now she swivelled it round, picked up a remote and fired up the TV. Most of the channels she flicked through showed Not On Air At Present signs, even those that would normally be broadcasting endless repeats of quiz shows. The kid channels were off as well. Finally she found the 24-hour news, which showed a single presenter sitting on the edge of a desk.'It has not been confirmed that the Prime Minister is showing any symptoms, ' she said. 'Some Cabinet ministers appear to have been taken ill or otherwise be unable to be present at these meetings. The Queen is going to be making a statement shortly from Balmoral, where the Royal Family have been staying for the past few weeks. For the moment, you are advised to stay at home or, if you feel you are in danger or anyone in your household is showing unusual symptoms, make your way to the nearest Government control point.' The bottom of the screen showed a constantly-scrolling invitation to view their website for futher information.
'What do they mean, control point? ' Joanna asked. Deb snorted. 'Fuck all. Not even sure there ever were any. Well some people seem to have been put up in church halls and gyms and that, but nothing else. But that's a recording anyway. It's been on for three days.'
'Did the Queen make a speech? We were watching the news, well Nicky was, and he didn't say anything about the Queen.'
Deb shrugged. 'I don't think so. Maybe the servants went mad and ate her before she could do it ? or maybe there weren't enough people still functioning at the Beeb to get it on the air.'
'So what are we going to do?' I said. 'No offence, but we can't stay here forever. What about the kids?' Joanna got up immediately and leaned over the barricade to pick Rosemary up.
'She's wet, I need to change her,' she said.
'I got you nappies, but I don't know about clothes,' I was on my feet too, remembering the shopping that had been dumped in the hallway with the buggies. Deb let us get on with it, after telling us that she'd just pulled everything off the kids' clothes rail in the charity shop, along with the random selection of clothing Joanna was wearing. To Joanna's delight, Deb's haul included a couple of Rosemary-sized baby grows and a little white dress, and I was pleased to find a pair of dungarees that would fit Mikey, along with a pile of assorted t-shirts, leggings and jackets the kids could probably be put into if there was nothing else. Joanna bore the baby off to the bathroom and Deb turned her slightly squinting eyes on me. 'You said you were going to get to your parents. Did you phone them? Or do you want to?' I suddenly thought of Mum and Dad, comfortably pottering around their house, and then I thought of the smashed windows, the dead woman in her own front garden, the way the world had slipped out of focus,
'Yes, yes please,' I stammered.'I was out of credit, I was going to get some - '
'Not sure the mobile networks are working,' Deb observed. 'I couldn't get much on mine earlier, but good old BT seems to be holding up.'
She waved me into the kitchen, where there was a landline handset stuck on the wall and I dialled the Brighton number. It just rang and rang, and I looked at my watch and saw it was nearly 6 pm. They were always home then. That was weak gin and tonic time, while Mum slung the frozen veg into a pan and checked the pie or the stew or whatever. I hung up and dialled again, with the same result. I put the phone back in it's cradle and went to the sitting room. Joanna had come back with Rosemary kicking happily in her arms in one of the babygrows.
'There's no answer,' I said.
'Maybe they cleared off,' Joanna suggested. 'Loads of people were taking off abroad, when it started getting bad. After all the riots, and then when everyone started getting ill.' I winced a bit, remembering how I'd dismissed the reports of rioting as the usual old bollocks and nothing worth worrying about, even though, as people had been saying on Facebook and on the blogs, it wasn't the right time of year for riots.
I honestly wasn't sure what bothered me more; Mum and Dad fleeing whatever kind of cataclysm this was without at least trying to take me and Mikey with them, or Mum and Dad struck down in their home, beaten and killed, vanished forever.
'At this point, we're supposed to go and look for them,' Deb said and I winced. 'How about you, Joanna, where are your parents? Any siblings who might be lost and wandering around somewhere?' Joanna looked as bemused as I felt at Deb's carefree tone. She seemed to pick this up, because she waved a hand at the book cases, which were stacked with as many DVDs as book. 'This is what I do, review horror fims, People generally want to go and look for someone when it's really not a good idea' she said, and glanced at me. 'Well, reviewing is what I do when I'm not singing. Anyway, Kizzy, weren't you going to cook? Mut be getting on towards dinnertime.' I looked at the clock and reaslied it was almost 6pm, Mikey at least was going to be announcing his hunger soon. If nothing else, I could at least make a good meal for him, one involving fresh vegetables, properly cooked.
Cooking soothed me.It was like one of those evenings I'd occasionally spent getting together with friends before all this whatever it was; a few of the girls in our shabby little flat passing the drinks around, cuddling Mikey abd their own kids, chatting about something and nothing ? Deb even put some music on, an undemanding 70s compilation. I'd grabbed the basics for a scratch spaghetti bolognese, which I threw together on Deb's battered but clean stove, and both Joanna and Deb ate appreciatively. Mikey also demolished the bowlful he was given, and even Rosemary, brought out to sit on her mum's knee like Mikey was sitting on mine, ate some of the spaghetti and a spoonful of sauce. When we'd finished, both kids were turning a bit sleepy so Joanna and I held them on our laps.Having wiped Mikey's hands and face, I dug his red blanket out and wrapped him up.
'Do you want to put them to bed?' Deb asked, and Joanna and I glanced at each other. 'For me, and probably for her, it was another of those little moments that are a dislocating shock: here we are in a strange place, limited provisions, limited facilities and it's bedtime for our little loves with no familiar bed or cot or storybook.
Deb got to her feet and went into the hallway. After a few minutes of thumping and shuffling, during which Joanna soothed Rosemary with a breastfeed and I cradled Mikey to me, gently stroking his ruffled curls, she reappeared looking rather pleased with herself.
'OK I think this might do for tonight,' she announced. In what was clearly her spare room, she'd spread out and inflated a double airbed, chucked an unzipped sleeping bag on top of it and surrounded it with filled boxes of books, just enough to confine little people safely and leave room for Joanna and I as well. I said it was great, and noted Joanna taking a bit of a deep breath before agreeing: maybe Rosemary had been used to a solid gold cot or something. More likely she was uneasy about the prospect of sleeping with either me, Mikey or both of us. Still, we took turns in the ungenerously sized bathroom to deal with things like washing, nappies, and , in my case, cleaning Mikey's teeth and in Joanna's, fretting a little about the fact that she couldn't do the same for Rosemary's two and a half pearly-whites.
Deb also offered a big clean bathtowel to do duty as a blanket for Rosemary, and her mother wrapped her in it before lowering her down with a kiss on the forehead. 'She might wake up,' Joanna said uneasily. If she does, I'm picking her up, I mean it.'
Mikey wanted Bida, and clutched the thing tightly to him as I rearranged his blanket round him and, not giving a toss what either of the other two thought, sang 'Dream a little dream' to him until his eyes closed. As it was, Joanna sat quietly beside me while I was singing, though Rosemary had fallen asleep almost instantly. Once Mikey was over as well, we both got up in silent accord and crept out of the room and across the hall. Deb had fired up her computer and was tapping away at it. She turned round with a slight frown as we approached her.
'It's not looking good,' she said.

frenchfancy · 19/06/2012 07:07

Great Solid - but you have now made me late for school!

PomBearWithAnOFRS · 19/06/2012 12:08

oooooooooo
Thanks solid - at least they're safe for now, I've been worrying about them stuck in the open all night Blush

R2PeePoo · 19/06/2012 13:57

Thank you SGB, I have a little boy the same age as Mikey and there is a lot there that I really related to, I was worried for him a bit Blush and my throat got a little tight when she ran back for his soft toy.
Very good.

solidgoldbrass · 19/06/2012 17:13

I must admit I deliberately made Mikey not look like my DS as I had to separate the fictional toddler from my own child...

R2PeePoo · 19/06/2012 17:52

Good plan!

solidgoldbrass · 19/06/2012 23:31

OK here's chapter four. It's a bit of a mess, there are things wrong with it that I basically won't be able to fix until I've written the whole thing and let it sit for a while, but... well, you might as well have a look Grin.

Deb had about four windows open on the screen and was toggling between them, occaisonally taking gulps from the now nearly empty bottle of Jack Daniels to the right of the screen. 'Trouble with this is that you can't tell what's true and what's bollocks, most of the time,' she muttered. 'And then shit keeps disappearing.'
She spun round in her chair to face us, and rubbed a hand over her face. 'Kids asleep?' she asked. We said that they were. Deb sighed, 'Poor little sods. Well, anyway, at least this shit seems to be staying here, staying in this country. Loads of stuff on Twitter from people everywhere else, trying to find out if their mates are still alive and not sounding like it's happening anywhere outside the UK. But everything here is looking, well, less good. I think anyone who hasn't got out of the country by now has missed the boat on that, as well.''
She went on to explain that the official news sites had nothing much but these static messages about reporting to your nearest control centre, and the most recent stuff was suggesting that ports and airports were closed. She said most of her Facebook friends were just inactive, with more seeming to disappear all the time. Then she showed us the Real World page, which had a load of updates about keeping calm and doing what you're told by your 'superiors' and then the comments attached to it, which were a whole lot of random guff about how this was great, that it was About Time, and all sorts of incoherent rubbish about women knowing their place and feminism Going Too Far and stuff about building a better future that made me feel quite queasy. In fact, I suddenly realised, I did feel more than a little bit queasy. I let out a bit of a burp, then swallowed it back down with a nasty taste in my mouth. Joanna was talking about how some of her neighbours had been interested in Real World, and so many of them had been taking Fredericks health stuff, even her husband Nicky had tried the Muscle Builder. She got a bit tearful at that point, fretting about Nicky and whether he was alive or not, and whether he would be looking for her, and I thought about making some suggestions but then I heard Mikey. He started with a pitiful little call of 'Mummy!' followed by retching, and by the time I'd got to the bedroom he'd thrown up all over himself, and when I'd got him cleaned up and his blanket washed, and thanked something or other that he hadn't puked on the mattress or on Rosemary, my own stomach was in a state of wild revolt and Joanna, coming in again to check on her daughter, was lucky she didn't get a missive from one or both ends of my body.

I'd made a big mistake in picking that chicken for our lunch, at least Deb reckoned that was the cause of the misery Mikey and I endured for the next day. My initial bout of throwing up left me weak and trembling, so I'd politely bowed out of further discussion, got myself undressed and gone to lie down, but the minute I did that, Mikey filled his nappy spectacularly, with wails of distress, , and by the time I'd changed him I was running quite a temperature, and so it went on. Deb and Joanna, having hastily rearranged things in the front room so as to make a nest for Rosemary and clear the sofa for Joanna to sleep on, did relays of bringing buckets and wet cloths and drinks of water to us,at least I think so, everything went into a bit of a blur of stumbling to and from the airbed and the bathroom, dizzy and feverish and evacuating myself from both ends, drifting off to sleep and being woken by Mikey either spewing, shitting explosively or crying with uncomprehending distress. I wasn't really aware that the house was attacked a couple of times, though not seriously: some bashing around in the garden in the small hours of the morning, and someone outside demanding we come out and account for ourselves, but someone who didn't, apparently, sound right at all. Joanna told me later that they'd talked at one point about leaving the two of us and making a run for it, but had worked out rapidly that they were better off staying put, or so she said.

It was shortly after nine on the Thursday that I woke up feeling more like a human being and aware that Mikey had slept through from the previous evening and was now stirring up and asking for breakfast, with no sign of either shits or pukes. I got up and went through to the main room; Deb was sitting by the computer and Joanna was feeding Rosemary.I rubbed my hand over my face and said,'I think we're OK now.' I was still uneasy and confused about the whole state of play, and was going to go on and thank Deb for putting up with us and suggest that Mikey and I went ? well, where? Somewhere. There would have to be somewhere to get to.
'It's working out like it does in the books,' Deb said, not taking her eyes off the screen. 'Out of the cities and into the communes. Already. Shall we go north or south, ladies?'
'North,' Joanna said, around the same time as I said, 'What? Where?' Deb explained, in a slightly condescending fashion, that as far as she could understand from her various internet buddies, people were starting to congregate at places that were set up for self-sufficiency and settling themselves there.
'Happening quite quickly, as well,' she remarked. 'But then lots of people have watched horror films. Have you ever noticed that people actually in horror films never seem to have watched horror films? They never seem to have a clue what they ought to be doing. Obviously, things are fucked here and we're in it for the long haul, so it makes sense to try and find yourself a decent place to set up home in.'
'I'm glad you can see the funny side,' Joanna snapped. We both glanced at her and glanced away. I don't know what Deb was thinking, but it struck me that she and Joanna might have found it a little bit awkard being thrown on each other's company so much.
'Well, we're running low on food,' Deb remarked, pushing herself away from the desk. 'Kizzy, you and Mikey ought to eat something, just grab whatever you fancy from what's there. Then maybe we should try to sort out what we're all going to do next.'
'Mummeee!' Mikey had clearly heard his cue, and come toddling into the hallway, rubbing his eyes. I abandoned the conversation for the time being and went to pick him up; he was damp but didn't smell pooey. There were only three nappies left in the pack I'd liberated, which made me realise that , whatever happened next, we were going to need more supplies. Exploring the kitchen reinforced the idea, it was nearly as bad as mine had been two days ago. Two days. I stopped for a moment and let a shiver run all the way through me, back of the neck to tips of my toes. Two days ago I'd been planning to run to my mum and dad, because I couldn't cope. Now the whole country couldn't cope. By the sound of it, while I'd been waging my own little war on the horrors of Life With No Money, the rest of the UK had been waging some kind of war on itself.
'Mummy! Hungry!' Mikey insisted, and I got as much of a grip as I could, and sorted him out some crackers and cheese and a couple of chocolate biscuits, and the same for myself. There were a couple of opened packs of cold meat in Deb's fridge, but I decided not to risk them on top of the doing we'd already had. Deb didn't have a kitchen table as such, but there was a high stool pushed under the kitchen counter so I sat Mikey on that with a plate of food in front of him, and stood with one arm lightly round him while we ate. I also positioned myself at such an angle that I could hear what Joanna and Deb were saying.
'So do we go and just stock up on stuff and come back here? Or do you want to be rid of us?' That was Joanna, sounding a bit shrill. 'I mean, you've been very kind and everything, but I suppose we are complete strangers really. And those two ? 'She did lower her voice here. 'Well what with them being so sick and everything -' Deb cut in. 'Oh come on, that was food poisoning, you didn't believe all that crap about a plague, did you?'
Joanna again: 'But loads of people were getting ill, the last couple of weeks, everywhere was short-staffed and... well, people were just getting really ill. And look at that man, that one that chased us, he was ill, not just mad or anything, really ill And they were saying on the news about having symptoms ? that's being ill, not being crazy.'
And Deb: 'Yeah, unusual symptoms. Ordinary puking and shitting off bad meat isn't unusual. Those weren't the sort of symptoms. Anyway, I'm not sure we can stay here. We all ought to move on out.'
'Yes but where to? Have you got a plan?' This last was said with a nasty sort of sneer, which made Mikey look uneasily in the direction of the door. He'd eaten up everything I'd found for him, so I gave him the last chocolate biscuit off my own plate and lifted him down, leading him towards the front room. Deb and Joanna stopped talking when they saw us, which I didn't think was all that healthy, but I stiffened my shoulders and gave Mikey's hand a little squeeze. If Deb wanted us to go, even though it didn't sound too much as though she did, then I would have to think of something, but I would think of something. Because of Mikey.
Deb was turning towards us, nothing about her manner suggesting she was going to throw the pair of us ? or the four of us for that matter ? out to fend for ourselves.
'Did you email Roy, by the way? Do you want to?' I was so wrong-footed by the question that I just stood there for a second or two. I'd been in my usual mindset of Not Really Thinking About Roy, and it occurred to me that, actually, given the size and impact of this fucking mess, Roy might have heard about it. He might be worrying about us. He might actually be horribly worried about us. For a moment I felt guilty and ashamed.
'Would you mind?' She gave me a bit of a look and got up from the computer chair. Scooping Mikey onto my lap I quickly checked my Hotmail account: no new messages. I was surprised at the sudden bout of rage that went through me: Roy had always been first and foremost about Roy, and music, and wherever the good times are. I was tempted to send him a blisteringly nasty email about the hell we'd lived through so far, and had actually begun to compose it when Deb leaned over my shoulder. 'I'm not sure how much news is getting through to the States,' she said. 'You ever been there? American news is all about America.' I wasn't really listening to her, I was trying to find a way to say what I wanted to say to Roy. Or even work out what I wanted to say to Roy. We'd never lived together anyway, so I found it hard to imagine what things might have been like if he had been there with us this last few days. I couldn't really picture him repelling all assailants from the top of the steps at Riley Court, he'd have been sitting on the floor, playing his guitar and insisting that they'd go away if we ignored them. Eventually I settled for ' Just letting you know that we are OK, will be in touch soon.'
'So what are we going to do now?' Joanna put in. I noticed for the first time that she was wearing a baggy black Wild Times t-shirt that Deb must have lent her, big enough for her to simply haul down the neckline and pop out a tit to feed her baby, and it occurred to me that my own ropey floral nightie wasn't exactly mountain fresh. Mikey wriggled, wanting to get down and I lowered him to the floor.
'Can't leave without a plan,' Deb was muttering. ' Got to have somewhere to go, obviously.'
She went into the kitchen and reappeared with a fresh bottle of whiskey, which she opened and took a gulp from, without offering it round. Not that I would have wanted any at that hour of the morning, and I very much doubted Joanna would.
'Course, what we really need is transport.' Deb announced. 'What with the kids ? Do you drive, either of you? I haven't done for years.'
'I can't,' I said, feeling suddenly stupid. For most of my adult life, people had suggested that I learn, but I simply hadn't bothered.
'Mind you, we'd have to steal a car anyway. And I have no idea how...' Deb bit her lips, but Joanna was suddenly full of optimism. 'No we don't ? I've got a car. My house isn't that far away, and I could get our things, as well. Rosemary's things, and something to wear. And there's food as well, tins and stuff in the kitchen. And -' She stopped, and shuddered, literally shuddered, it was an all-over thing. 'And, well, if I don't have to go on my own, there's Nicky. I could find out - ' For a moment my mind had gone blank, but then I remembered: her husband. The husband she thought she'd killed after he went for her. Now it was my turn to shudder. Deb was frowning, assessing the risks as she swallowed another mouthful of whiskey.
'OK,' she said, eventually. 'I can't think of a better idea than that. We'll get your car and stuff, and then come back here and work out what to do next. OK, get yourselves dressed, get the kids dressed, let's do it.' She herself, with the run of her own wardrobe, was already sorted; I put my once-smart, now rather crumpled and smelling slightly stale, shirt and trousers back on and Joanna re-donned the tracky bottoms and wellies Deb had got for her in the charity shop raid, keeping on the t-shirt and also borrowing a pair of Deb's socks. Mikey had a clean outfit left from the stuff I'd brought from Riley Court, so I put him in that, then re-packed the rest of our stuff, including some of the things Deb had taken from the charity shop, into the bag.
Before we left, Deb revisited the kitchen and came out with an odd array of utensils; one large carving knife which she proceeded to slip into the inside pocket of her leather jacket, a couple more knives, a hammer and a rolling pin.
She saw my eyes light on it and almost smirked. 'Used to have a boyfriend who was a baker,' she said. 'But, look, we don't know what's out there, or who's out there. Probably not a bad idea to be ready.
What was out there, at least the first obstacle out there, which we hadn't noticed before opening the door, was pouring rain. I had my parka and Mikey his coat and shoes, but there was nothing in the way of rain gear for poor Rosemary ? or Joanna. Deb gave Joanna a dark green hoodie to wear, but Jo was far more concerned about the baby, to be fair. In the end we settled for covering Rosemary in a big bath towel, doubled over and fastened to the buggy's frame with clothes pegs, and tying one of Deb's bandanas on her head, with a couple more tucked in Joanna's pockets to replace the first one when it got soaked through. Rosemary howled dismally as we plodded along the shining wet pavements, and I can't say I blamed her. Joanna hunched over the buggy, I think trying to soothe the baby; Mikey was quiet enough, though he kicked his legs repetitively. I wasn't feeling quite right yet, still a little weak and wobbly after all that upchucking, and the only one who seemed in a chipper sort of mood was Deb.
'Best thing that could happen, really,' she said as we turned towards the precinct. 'This rain. Nothing like rain for keeping arseholes indoors.'
'What about other people, though, people who are all right, just scared?' I ventured, before I could stop myself. 'I mean, we can't be the only ones left, maybe we'll see other people, find out more about what's going on.' Deb widened her eyes. 'Suppose we might, at that.' She didn't say anything more as we drew near the precinct, and I went back to thinking about illness and sickness. Not just because I wasn't feeling brilliant, but because of what I'd overheard. I was sure Deb was right and Mikey and I had been suffering from nothing more than food poisoning, but when I tried to come up with a set definition of what the plague or not-plague actually was, I realised that I actually had no idea. People were just being Not Well. Nothing was being said about what kind of unwellness was happening, not even the basics of whether you should watch out for fever, or rashes, or coughing or even vomiting.
I slowed down as we got to the edge of the precinct, expecting the others would as well, thinking we could go back to the minimarket which at least had nappies, but Joanna was forging ahead. Deb saw where I was looking.
'Better to get the car first and load up afterwards,' she said. I didn't feel too sure about that idea myself, but I didn't fancy arguing the point. After all, if I pissed our companions off, there was nothing to stop them abandoning Mikey and me.
''Home?' Mikey put in at this point. 'Go home Mummy?' I fought back an urge to burst into tears. My poor little boy had recognized the familiar aspect of the manky old precinct after a couple of nights in totally unknown territory, and now he wanted his own safe space back. But his home wasn't safe any more. I wasn't sure if anywhere was. Particularly if it was just the two of us.
'Not now, lovey,' I said gently. 'We're having an adventure. Mikey's going to lots of new places.'
We got across the park without any incidents, though there were one or two heaps in the grass that I just decided not to do more than glance at. The other two either didn't notice them or had chosen, like me, to ignore them.
Drake Manor Park, where Joanna and Rosemary lived ? or had lived ? looked very smart indeed as we drew near it, though when we got right up to the gates it was a touch less impressive. The gates themselves were buckled, as though something had been driven right through them, and the first couple of houses we passed had smashed up stuff and litter all over their gardens. Joanna bent her head over Rosemary's stroller and said nothing, so Deb and I just carried on walking. The rain had finally stopped, and the sun was partway out, but the day still felt a touch oppressive.
The house she led us to looked ordinary enough, curtains in the windows, neat little front garden with a circle of flowerpots stood on flagstones round a central pebble square, and a garage to the side. The front door was shut and locked, though, and somehow I didn't think Joanna, in her original panic-driven flight, had secreted a key about herself.
She saw me look at her and seemed to read my mind.
'We keep a spare one, you know,' she said. 'It should be here, hang on.' She pushed Rosemary's buggy at Deb, who put one hand on it, and shifted one of the pots, which was filled with some droopy orange flowering shrub, liberating a Yale key from underneath it. She'd been quite bright and focussed all the way over here, but she took a couple of steps towards the door and stopped dead. I knew what she was thinking, or at least partly ? this had been her home, where she'd been living happily and comfortably, at least by the look of it, with her husband and her beloved baby daughter. Two days ago she'd run from it, bolting headlong out of the place in her nightie with the baby in her arms, because her husband had attacked her and she'd had to beat the crap out of him just to get away. While there were one or two ex-boyfriends of mine that I could probably have murdered and walked away whistling, I did understand that she was frightened of what she might find if she opened that door.
'Jo, you don't have to do it,' I said, surprising myself. Mikey chose that moment to start clamouring to get out of his buggy, but I shushed him. I thought I could detect something of a smell, something inherently nasty, shit and blood and something else.
'Maybe let me go in first?' Deb suggested. 'In case.. You and Kizzy stay outside with the kids for a moment and let me check?'
Joanna bit her lips and shut her eyes and sort of thrust the key at Deb, then took a step back and reached for Rosemary's stroller. She undid the straps and picked the still-grumbling baby up, holding Rosemary tightly to her.
'Go on then. Please. His name's Nicky, call him when you open the door, please call him.'

Deb did as she asked, unlocking the door and calling 'Nicky? Mr Finton-Scott? Are you there?
I noticed she braced herself across the doorway in a way that stopped either Joanna or I from seeing much round her; though she wasn't fat, she took up a fair bit of space when she wanted to. No one answered her, so she took a step across the threshold, then another. Then she made a little exasperated noise.
'Sorry Jo, but someone's trashed your kitchen. Think you might have had looters in here.'
'What? What the hell? Oh that's not fair!' Joanna almost shouted. She tried to push past Deb, who held her back and turned around, looking at me.
'Kizzy, will you come in with me? Jo, we'll take a quick look round, can you look after the kids?'
Joanna's eyes were wild, she was obviously dying to scream 'But this is MY HOUSE!' at us and anyone else who might be listening, but at the same time she didn't actually want to go inside it at all. I didn't terribly want to leave Mikey with her, either, having got this fairly deeprooted impresion that they didn't much like one another or were at least mutually indifferent. Still, I didn't want to stand in Joanna's somehow depressingly neat and tidy garden fretting about things.
I followed Deb into the hall, seeing in one quick glance that she was right about the kitchen ? the cupboard doors were all open and so was the fridge, there was crockery thrown about the floor along with a broken jar of jam and some packets of herbs and spices. The sitting room, to the left of the hall, looked untouched when I glanced into it, but Deb was already heading up the stairs.
'Mr Scott? Mr Finton-Scott? Nicky?'

He was in the bedroom, in the bed. The upstairs landing and the bedroom did show a few indications of a fight, so there was no reason to doubt Joanna's version of events, but Nicky Finton-Scott had clearly come round, in more ways than one, after she'd left. He'd killed himself with a bottle of gin and the contents of several pill bottles which were lined up neatly on the bedside table and left a note on the other pillow. It was clearly designed to be read by whoever found him, so Deb and I read it.
'It's my fault and I'm putting an end to it. Please tell my wife JOANNA FINTON SCOTT and my daughter ROSEMARY that I love them very much and I hope they got away and are safe. I am not safe and never will be. Jo I don't blame you at all. Kiss Rosemary for me. Whoever finds me please tell them I love them.'
His face was battered, lip split and nose squashed, but it also looked somehow wrong, a strange colour and distorted. I made no claims to be an expert in what happens to us when we die, but surely he'd been dead for less than 48 hours so he shouldn't look that peculiar. There was a wedding picture on the wall, Joanna with her hair all braided up with beads and a fair-haired, pink-cheeked classic Englishman in a morning suit next to her, only just recognisable as the dead man in the bed.
'Bet he's not the only one,' Deb murmured, and then she bent over and pulled the quilt up over his weird mashed face.'Poor bastard.'

When we got back outside, Joanna was bumping Mikey's buggy to and fro while he objected loudly, hugging Rosemary and glancing from side to side.
'Nicky?'
'He's there, but he's dead, Jo,' Deb said, very gently. 'You didn't kill him. It wasn't your fault. But I don't think we should hang around here. Do you want to get anything, or shall we just take the car?'
I had gone straight to Mikey, and having unstrapped him from the buggy I was letting him toddle about in Joanna's poncey front garden, only half-listening. Sorry as I was for the fate of Nicky Finton-Scott, which was only a moderate amount as he had, after all, tried to kill his wife and presumably his baby before he killed himself, I was also fretful about my own son. Mikey was still holding on to Bida as he pottered round the flowerpots, little trousers sagging, and I unslung my backpack in order to change him.
The end of Joanna and Deb's conversation, which I had not been paying much attention to, was that Joanna went upstairs by herself to say her goodbyes to her dead husband and grab some of her things, while Deb was quite literally holding the baby. She came back out into the garden, gently jiggling Rosemary, while I was buttoning Mikey, clean-nappied, back into his clothes.
'Bright little sod, isn't he?' she observed, watching Mikey introduce Bida to a dead geranium or some such. 'It must be even scarier when you have kids, something like this.'
She shook herself a little and turned back towards the house. 'Let's go and see if there's anything left in the kitchen so Jo doesn't have to.'
Mikey, I think, picked up on the word 'kitchen'. 'Hungry, Mummy!' he remarked, so I held his hand and followed Deb inside. From upstairs came the sound of running water, and I reckoned that Joanna must be washing herself, and wondered briefly if it would be totally insensitive to ask if I could do the same. The hall was narrow, leading directly into the kitchen, which kind of opened out from it and was bigger than it had appeared when we'd glanced at it. French windows at the back of it stood wide open, and though we'd seen the signs of trashing and looting, what we didn't see until we were actually into the damned room was the body in the corner. Deb gave a hiss and a step back, nearly squashing Mikey, and I snatched him up instantly.
'Don't let him see, for fucks' sake!' she yelped. I don't know if he saw anything or whether her shock got through to him, but he started to cry and so did Rosemary, and we backed rapidly out, bumping against each other in the hallway.
'Shit,' I muttered, then winced, having always tried not to swear in front of Mikey. Deb and I made it back to the front garden and she sat down on the little stone bench by the birdbath, still cuddling Rosemary to her, closing her eyes. I didn't want to close mine, thinking that what I'd seen would be imprinted on my eyelids, so instead I concentrated on Mikey, setting him on his feet and starting to chatter to him about the leaves and the flowers.
Joanna came out to us a few moments later, lugging a bulging holdall in one hand and carrying a bright pink teddy in the other. She'd changed into jeans, trainers and a pale yellow button-fronted sweater with a lightweight navy raincoat on top, and put her hair up. She looked better than she'd done in all the time I'd known her, and I remember noticing that she had put on both earrings and a bit of makeup, and that it seemed a bit of an odd thing to do, pretty much over her husband's dead body.
Dead body. There was a dead body in her kitchen, too. I thought I might throw up again but my stomach was probably too empty.
'OK,' she said, not making it a question, and then. 'Rosemary, look, here's Teddybaby!' She dumped the holdall on the path and bent over to pick up her daughter, juggling baby and teddy, and Rosemary, like most babies, was instantly distracted by the toy and stopped screaming. Joanna looked at the pair of us. 'You said the kitchen's been looted?'
'Yeah.' Deb got to her feet. 'And, er, one of the looters didn't get away. There's a body in there.' Joanna's eyes widened. 'Maybe we should go now,' I said. 'I don't think there's anything much left in your kitchen.' And I wanted to get the hell away from that house. Car or no car, I wanted to be somewhere else, preferably back at Deb's where there were bars on the windows. We could go back via the precinct and liberate some more food and nappies from the supermarket or something.
Joanna frowned. 'Is the buggy there? Did you see Rosemary's buggy? Only it's a better one and I'd rather take it, and leave that old junkheap.'
We hadn't noticed, and said so, and there was a moment's silence.
'I need my car keys, as well, they'd better be there,' Joanna said firmly. She turned and stepped back across the threshold.
'This is my bloody house. I don't care who's dead in my kitchen, it's my house.' Carrying Rosemary, she stomped back down the hall, and Deb, with a shrug in my direction, followed her. I really didn't want to go in that place again, so I sat down on the bench and let Mikey go on with his explorations of the plant pots. I didn't care for Drake Manor Place at all, but I wasn't yet ready to walk out alone into the great unknown.

frenchfancy · 20/06/2012 07:18

Great - I like that there are doubts about Joanna starting to creep in.

SkinnyVanillaLatte · 20/06/2012 07:33

Still enjoying it!! I liked the dead body in the kitchen.

PomBearWithAnOFRS · 20/06/2012 14:16
Grin
R2PeePoo · 20/06/2012 14:37

I wish I hadn't read that before going to bed last night sgb.....it gave me nightmares.

Was excellent though.

SkinnyVanillaLatte · 21/06/2012 09:33

I have now read 'Fighting to survive' and 'Siege'. I have to say they were an enjoyable read,despite the fact that they deviated a little from what I would usually go for.

You can tell I haven't been doing a lot other than reading Grin...

R2PeePoo · 21/06/2012 11:00

I'm struggling a little with Feed, I keep putting it down and taking a while to pick it up again. Hoping the second one is better. Would have preferred the story from an Irwin perspective I think, than a Newsie.

Flesh Eaters is better although its taken a while to get to the faster paced stuff I want. Nice catastrophe writing though, the zombies are just a nice added extra.

Took a detour and read 'Undead' by Kirsty McKay which is YA with zombies. It was excellent at first but the zombies tailed off after a while. It was nice and short though. My favourite YA zombie/infected stuff has to be Charlie Higson and also Jonathon Maberry still, they are much better written.

R2PeePoo · 25/06/2012 14:03

Any chance of more of your story SGB?

I finished Feed but gave up half way through Deadline. I found it was less of a zombie novel and more political/crime etc with incidental zombies. Which is fine, but I just couldn't concentrate.

SkinnyVanillaLatte · 27/06/2012 09:17

R2,I completely get where you're coming from with the Mira Grant books.

I've just got a second hand copy of Plague by Graham Masterton. I remember reading and enjoying it many years ago - it'll be interesting to see if it's still so enjoyable.

(I also have picked up a 2nd hand copy of Cell by Stephen King as mentioned in this thread.)

PomBearWithAnOFRS · 27/06/2012 10:46

Bah humbug to Cell - it's derivative pap! I much preferred his work when he was drunk/high Grin King is either brilliant or utterly dismal though, and different people who agree seem to split his work into the same two divisions as I do, but we don't always agree which "list" is the good one and which is the crap one Grin
Brian Keene's The Rising and City of the Dead are really good - he puts some great original twists into the traditional zombie stuff. One thing though, don't buy the first without making sure you can get hold of the second as soon as you finish it - it is one of the most gripping heartbreaking cliff hangers I have ever read. I almost cried with frustration waiting for the second one to arrive so I could find out what happened next!

comixminx · 27/06/2012 13:01

Cor - SGB's story is pretty exciting! The way it ends up laid out on MN - quite wide IYSWIM - means I am skimming a bit but it is definitely gripping.

PomBearWithAnOFRS · 29/06/2012 10:00

I just finished a great anthology on the Kindle - it's "Pandemonium - Stories of the Apocalypse" edited by David Bryher.
Each story was inspired by one of the paintings of John Martin, and they were all good Grin

frenchfancy · 05/07/2012 17:57

Where are you solid? We are waiting for the next bit of the story.