To ask if you would view this as suitable/buy for a teen?

Your description made me think of Tomorrow when the war began - aimed at a similar age group and also has violence and death, with a female narrator.

Though it sounds like it might fit a bit more with 'new adult' age groups than young adult?

I struggled to follow your plot outline... and the lesbian bit you mentioned in a later post sounds bizarre and out of place. (Although I must admit that I get fed up of any gay film for teenagers being aimed squarely at boys.)

As others have said, the characters are too old for audience. Why not just write the book and worry about the audience later?

She loves all sorts...mysteries, murders, adventure etc. She loved the Hunger Games... if there is an element of something to solve, it will capture her attention.

I don't really think it would be interesting to teens, they like that kind of plot in more of an apocalypse or fantasy setting and with characters their own age. Prime Ministers are a bit too real, more of a James Bond audience so much older.

That being said if it’s a sapphic thing then it already has its own selling point. What about putting it on Wattpad? Big sapphic fic scene over there.

Sounds pretty niche!
Good luck though

Your description IMO is hard to follow. Is it a dystopia? Where’s the coming of age element? Where’s the character arc?

From the description you’ve offered, it might be suited better as an adult crime thriller / dystopian novel rather than for young adult. But maybe I’ve just not caught the gist of it. Any excerpts ?

Just write the thing then worry about it. The best laid plot will develop with writing and editing so worrying too much about it now is silly imo.

I think it sounds interesting. I am not a teenager though so not at all the target audience! Whether it's any good would depend on the character development. I hated violence as a teenager and still do. I think that's unusual though.

Something to look forward to so (mum of 12 y/o) 😂

With respect it's there because the audience is there. At that age tolerance and exploration is really high. I remember being fascinated by serial killers and my now 16 is too.

It's the age I think when we really pull apart nature v nurture.

Thanks!

What sort of books does she like?

I think my dd 14 would read it.

Deffo am writing detail in - just no gore along the lines of someone being disemboweled or raped - I've seen far too much of that in 'Young Adult' books.

I'm trying to keep it at game of thrones level - I mainly think it's not such a violent book - it has some disturbing undertones however IMO.

Thanks XD

Hopefully some day in the not so distant future you pick up a book that looks interesting, and get deja vu

@OPforgotherpassword plot spoiler 😂
(seriously.....I do like the sound of it)

I was trying to work out an ending in which P ends up dead - not killed by K though - that would be far too boring and end up never really developing K's character, and K now at peace with I's death leaves military life, and has a form of happy ending.

It ends with P and his little gang of terrorists laying dynamite at the foundation of the barracks used for the boot camp.

K learns of this planned attack from J, and manages to evacuate the children.

She then goes into the basement, locking P in there.

When she realises J run back into the barracks, hoping to stop P, she runs in, saves him, by lowering him through a window, in which she cannot fit herself, as the building collapses, and she is presumed dead.

The barracks collapsed with the rubble 'tenting' above two foundations.

This effectively saved her, and she manages to crawl out.

Battered and bruised, she goes to the nearest New Red Army barracks, and is patched up.

She is later on awarded multiple medals for the saving of the children, which she feels she does not 'deserve' - as her only reason to even be at the boot camp was to get close to J - giving her the opportunity to finish off P.

She goes to visit I's grave, laying the Order Of Personal Courage awarded to her for saving the children on the grave of I who taught her everything she knew, and gave her the courage to run in and save J.

Now living as a civilian, K turns on the television in her house, seeing an announcement that the conspirators in the bombing will be executed by firing squad later that day.

That's what I'm aiming for - her marriage which will eventually become very important can't be done unless she's 18 or older.

There won't be any sex at all - I don't really think her character will develop from that and she's in a terrible state regarding trusting others - the only reason she marries A is because they know each other from the early days of the revolution.

Her marriage then ends up to be a terrible idea - as she keeps on panicking and worrying about P killing A just to torment her.

most reminds me of How I Live Now in terms of setting

To me it all sound pretty par for the course for YA fiction so the problem I would anticipate is making it distinctive. Doesn’t seem too convoluted to me. How does it end?

I'm doing my best to avoid any sex regardless - It's not a romance in any way.

Your characters age is fine for YA - she’ll need to be at least 18 for US audiences if there’s a romance/suggested sexual element anyway but your books sounds as if it’ll be at the 15/16 readers age rather than the 12/13 age anyway.
Some 12 year olds read adult books,
some are still reading Diary of a Wimpy Kid - it’s a huge range.

I quite like the sound of it.
I like a bit of alternative society/dystopia.