"Once upon a time there was a grown up Fairy. She had two fairy children. They were going to the park. One of the fairy children saw a slide. That child went to play on it. Then the other fairy child went to play on it too. Then after all that it was time to go home. At home it was lunch time. They had three sandwiches and some fruit. After lunch they went to some shops. Then they went home. At home it was tea time."
She had help spelling 'slide' and 'sandwiches' but otherwise it is all her own work. Punctuation as above (done by her). She started out writing her 'p's backwards, but noticed herself, and self corrected, and went through her work finding them all to correct.
She is in Year 1. Where would this put her, levels-wise, out of curiosity?
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dd2 has written a story - can anyone tell me how she is doing?
silverfrog · 06/02/2013 18:04
Glad to be of assistance 
He wants to do the 500 words story competition... Should be interesting 
thanks everyone.
love the jumping kangaroo and multiplying cats stories.
CheckpointCharlie - that is a brilliant summary of where dd2 is/what she could be doing - thanks so much (can you come and be her teacher, please? ).
Her handwriting is ok - quite neat and small (ish, for a 5 year old!) - was a bit wobbly writing this as se decided to write on an unlined sheet of A4, in portrait - don't think I could keep my writing straight for that! She can write cursive, but it went by the wayside a bit doing this - think it interrupted her flow a bit, so this was mostly printed, with some cursive and lots of tails. the odd capital in the middle of words (often 'f'), and a couple of letters written backwards (again, think it was due to flow, as she can write them all perfectly well; she does know the correct formation, and usually is ok, but does try to cut corners with some letters (usually 'm' and 'n' - might be copying my (atrocious) handwriting there 
, although I do make an effort when writing things for her, so she would be copying examples she has seen lying around, iyswim)
Pretty good. She could do with using some more describing words though to tick all the boxes. And YY to extended sentences, using and or so eg the fairy saw a slide so they went to play on it.
It makes sense, is well punctuated and has openers and time connectives. I would agree with a 1a based purely on that. I would also be interested in what her handwriting is like, does she form her letters correctly, does she have ascenders and descenders and does she have any capitals in the middle of words?
Encourage her to think of describing words, and 'name the noun' ie name the shop, describe the sandwich, describe the fairy children.
1a is the expected level by the end of the year so I think she is there or thereabouts already (based only on that and having not seen her handwriting!)
She will need to use more extensive language and connect sentences to push into a 2c. She will also have to master speech marks, question marks, commas in lists and start to expand her descriptions of things and people.
Also, she could tell the reader how the characters feel as an ending, 'the fairy children were tired out as they had had such a busy day' for eg.
She can come and be in my class please!
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