dd2 has written a story - can anyone tell me how she is doing?

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silverfrog Wed 06-Feb-13 18:04:18

"Once upon a time there was a grown up Fairy. She had two fairy children. They were going to the park. One of the fairy children saw a slide. That child went to play on it. Then the other fairy child went to play on it too. Then after all that it was time to go home. At home it was lunch time. They had three sandwiches and some fruit. After lunch they went to some shops. Then they went home. At home it was tea time."

She had help spelling 'slide' and 'sandwiches' but otherwise it is all her own work. Punctuation as above (done by her). She started out writing her 'p's backwards, but noticed herself, and self corrected, and went through her work finding them all to correct.

She is in Year 1. Where would this put her, levels-wise, out of curiosity? <really, really is out of curiosity. I know next to nothing about NT levels. dd1 is severely autistic, and I know just about all there is to know about P levels and delayed development, but nothing about typical levels/expectations>

ZZZenAgain Fri 08-Feb-13 11:46:27

I thought the teacher probably had a giggle at that one

Haberdashery Fri 08-Feb-13 11:45:14

>> played with himself

<childish snigger>

ZZZenAgain Fri 08-Feb-13 11:06:09

I loved my dd's year 1 story about a Pokemon who played with himself (!) and started WW3.

Wallace Fri 08-Feb-13 10:56:54

Brilliant sounding out smile

Haberdashery Thu 07-Feb-13 23:28:36

That was my favourite bit too.

Wallace Thu 07-Feb-13 21:30:25

igzarmpll grin

Haberdashery Thu 07-Feb-13 21:22:14

Haha! Liking his definition of people there.

Would you like to hear about superheroes?

This is a piece DD wrote at school a few weeks ago.

Sooperhiros are cint (kind). There are reel live sooperhiros too. for igzarmpll grace Darling. There are pitend ones too. like batcat. And if they cant do it they never ever ever gif up. And there never rood. But some hiros are ded.

If she could just amalgamate the right bits of supaheros and sooperhiros, she'd nearly be able to spell it.

Wallace Thu 07-Feb-13 20:08:04

grin

thegreylady Thu 07-Feb-13 18:56:45

He also wrote on a separate day-Space peopl are somtimes men but somtimes not.Thay can be wimen or monkeys as well!!!!!!![exclamation marks are mine]
I am not sure about the last sentence myself-the juxtaposition is just wrong.

Runoutofideas Thu 07-Feb-13 16:40:01

I was just thinking I never see what my dd2 can write. (Yr 1 Aug born). Today she came home with her topic book about toys where she has written:

"I got my toy for chistmas. Her name is Merida. She has red cerle (curly) hare and her mummy and the bruthers tern into bears. The bruthers tern into three baby bears. When she was a baby she ran into the woods and she got lost luckerlee she fownd the way out of the woods. She fownd her family agayn. She wochis (watches) telly with me"

I particularly liked "luckerlee" and "wochis"! She never writes anything at home so I was quite impressed!

Wallace Thu 07-Feb-13 15:22:36

Glad to be of assistance grin

He wants to do the 500 words story competition... Should be interesting confused

Haberdashery Thu 07-Feb-13 14:46:18

I love 'feers'!

learnandsay Thu 07-Feb-13 14:28:59

The greylady. I like it muchly.

thegreylady Thu 07-Feb-13 14:14:25

Dgs is also yr1
Here is his offering [no help] gold star and smiley sticker from teacher.
I like lions best.lions are preditors wich eat other animals.A daddy lion has a big hary mane not like a horse mane more flufy.
Mummy lions are feers and have babies called cubs.
lions are called KING of the animals wich I think is true.
There was a drawing of a lion at the bottom.

silverfrog Thu 07-Feb-13 11:56:45

thanks everyone.

love the jumping kangaroo and multiplying cats stories.

CheckpointCharlie - that is a brilliant summary of where dd2 is/what she could be doing - thanks so much (can you come and be her teacher, please? grin).

Her handwriting is ok - quite neat and small (ish, for a 5 year old!) - was a bit wobbly writing this as se decided to write on an unlined sheet of A4, in portrait - don't think I could keep my writing straight for that! She can write cursive, but it went by the wayside a bit doing this - think it interrupted her flow a bit, so this was mostly printed, with some cursive and lots of tails. the odd capital in the middle of words (often 'f'), and a couple of letters written backwards (again, think it was due to flow, as she can write them all perfectly well; she does know the correct formation, and usually is ok, but does try to cut corners with some letters (usually 'm' and 'n' - might be copying my (atrocious) handwriting there blush, although I do make an effort when writing things for her, so she would be copying examples she has seen lying around, iyswim)

That is true. Was old skool year 2 requirements. Obv need to redigest my app grids labelle

Wallace and Habedashery, thank goodness you came along. Was despairing about my dd.
You do not need speechmarks for 2c. (And you do not call them speech marks any longer. They are 'inverted' commas'.)

Oh BUGGER. You didn't ask for a parents consultation!

Sorry, i realise you ask for a parent consultation. blush grin

Pretty good. She could do with using some more describing words though to tick all the boxes. And YY to extended sentences, using and or so eg the fairy saw a slide so they went to play on it.

It makes sense, is well punctuated and has openers and time connectives. I would agree with a 1a based purely on that. I would also be interested in what her handwriting is like, does she form her letters correctly, does she have ascenders and descenders and does she have any capitals in the middle of words?
Encourage her to think of describing words, and 'name the noun' ie name the shop, describe the sandwich, describe the fairy children.

1a is the expected level by the end of the year so I think she is there or thereabouts already (based only on that and having not seen her handwriting!)
She will need to use more extensive language and connect sentences to push into a 2c. She will also have to master speech marks, question marks, commas in lists and start to expand her descriptions of things and people.
Also, she could tell the reader how the characters feel as an ending, 'the fairy children were tired out as they had had such a busy day' for eg.

She can come and be in my class please! grin

Haberdashery Wed 06-Feb-13 21:23:34

Thank you. I like it a lot too but wish her spelling was as good as silverfrog's DD!

KnightBusRider Wed 06-Feb-13 21:17:46

Haberdashery I love that story grin

Corygal Wed 06-Feb-13 21:15:11

I LOVE the star that is higher than the sun. Well done, DD.

Haberdashery Wed 06-Feb-13 21:13:03

Haha! Like the cat explosion a lot.

Wallace Wed 06-Feb-13 21:09:43

Great stories btw

Found one of ds2's offerings from a few months ago - huge writing on 2 sheets A4 paper (hence the odd spacing) and he was running out of room towards the end...

The c
atwos
wrocin
duon
The set

a nt t here
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aba n and the
wos hu
njiz
cas
The e nbiL
dignstuitoo
mosu

"The cat was walking down the street and there was a bang and there was hundreds [of] cats. Then buildings turned into monsters"

Some letters are also back to front. We do wonder if he is dyslexic.

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