In terms of getting the message over to the uninformed middle I think it's good. It's short, it covers the main points that can be grasped by your average person, and it avoids any of the off-putting jargon and abbreviations.
Having got nowhere with my robot Tory MP I might actually send that with a small addition pointing out what hormone-based transition means for young people.
We take those arguments for granted and they are self evident to us, but it's great to see them laid out in a popular free paper. They really are quite radical for some. Wonder if George is baiting Theresa again