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Our Girl and Captain James Discussion Thread Vol V

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icemist · 24/11/2014 22:12

Feel free to join in as we discuss all things Our Girl related

Honorary Members:
Ben Aldridge
Tony Grounds

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icemist · 24/11/2014 22:23

Dear Ben,
Please enjoy our ramblings, drawings and attempts to emulate all the great things about Our Girl.

We all hope you enjoy reading it all

Thanks

From us all

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monopod · 24/11/2014 22:24

It's been a long long day; catching up now while listening to OG soundtrack and delighted to see that iloverhubarb has taken on the fanfic challenge! I thought I might try to write too but equally happy to just read what the two of you come up with :) Maybe I'll try writing something else later :)

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monopod · 24/11/2014 22:26

P/S: You have to repost your opening chapter so we have the whole story on here :)

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Ilovelblue · 24/11/2014 22:26

Oh who had copied and pasted it?

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Richtea19 · 24/11/2014 22:29

Love the new fanfic name iloverhubarb. My eyes read it ilover hubarb !! Just tired.. Got to be time for bed, quick check out of tumblr for CJ picture fest! :)

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snumpy · 24/11/2014 22:30

Hurray, Volume 5 Grin

There's some fantastic fanfic going on here, you both write so well - look out Klipdoctor you've got some serious competition

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icemist · 24/11/2014 22:30

Me, I ve just switched laptop off. Can do it in morning?

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pixieg1rl · 24/11/2014 22:31

Hello new thread. Liking the story so far, lots of hair fluffing and lip biting.

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Richtea19 · 24/11/2014 22:31

I've got it, will copy on next post

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Ilovelblue · 24/11/2014 22:33

Yes, I need to get ready for bed too. Rhubarb not sure when you are planning the next scene, but it's pretty unlikely I could do any more before tomorrow evening anyway as it's a bit risky doing anything like this at work. My reputation, such as it is, would be in tatters. That's tatters, not taters! Hahahaha.

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Richtea19 · 24/11/2014 22:36

As the hospital bed carrying Sohail disappeared through the double -doors of the ward and the urgent voices of the medical staff gradually became fainter, Captain James raised his head to look directly into Molly’s eyes. He still held her face in his comforting hands. He wanted to stay like this, to hold her here and keep her safe from harm but at the back of his mind the nagging concern that had restrained him all these months would not be silenced. He slowly, unwillingly, released her, his eyes never leaving her face. Her beautiful green eyes, shining with fresh tears, gazed questioningly at him. She was looking to him for an answer to the bewildering events that had just unfolded.
“Dawes,” he smiled, hesitantly and bit his lip, a habit of his since boyhood and a small outward sign that he was uncertain of himself.
“We need to talk.”



It's years since I did any creative writing. Correcting somebody else's reports at work isn't quite the same thing. Is this any good?

Where? We can’t talk here, can we?”
“We’ll have to go to my quarters. Follow me round.”

It was all he could do not to hold her and to comfort her but it was too risky and he was stern faced, desperately reining in all his emotions, as they went back to his quarters. Molly sniffed and tried to wipe away her tears so that none of Two Section could tell what had just passed between their captain and medic.

Captain James opened the door and pushed Molly in ahead of him. She looked round, taking it all in, the neat and orderly paperwork on the desk, his clothes all on hangers, and everywhere there was that musky, manly smell she had come to love. The time before when she had been in, the night when he had given her the words to the duet they were about to sing, it was dark and she had in fact been caught unawares when he shouted of her. It was also the night he first called her “Dawsie” and when she had started to wonder if her attraction towards him was in fact being reciprocated.

“What are we going to do Boss? I don’t think I can go on much longer like this. I’ve already admitted to you how I feel and I am scared I can’t hide it much longer from the rest of the Section.”

Captain James sighed and dragged his hands through his hair and rubbed the back of his neck. “It’s against all army regulations Molly, you know that, but I'm finding it hard to control my feelings towards you. I can’t even look at you without wondering who’s noticed me. Kinders is a bit more perceptive than you would think! And I was sure Dangleberries knew something was up when we were singing the duet and he was playing the keyboard.”

Molly just stared at him, almost unable to comprehend that he was saying he was just as attracted to her as she was to him.

“I think if we can hang on till we finish this tour, I will speak to my CO, tell him how I feel and then when we get home, one of us will have to be assigned elsewhere. If we can wait out, I think we can sort this easily and still be together.” He bit his lip again uncertainly, waiting for Molly’s agreement, hoping and praying that he’d said the right thing. She was an unpredictable little madam and he couldn’t be sure he’d handled this right.

Not speaking before she moved, Molly reached up and kissed him full on the lips.

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firegirl · 24/11/2014 22:37

iloverhubarb please carry on it's good!
ilove I remembered you said you'd be in your stag pants today and never got a chance to ask you if they were comfy though I kept meaning to. Hope you have enjoyed having pseudo CJ so 'ahem' close to you all day?

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Ilovelblue · 24/11/2014 22:40

firegirl the pants gave me a very nice warm feeling ALL day! Haha. They've been very comfy. You know how some look the part but are bloody uncomfortable to wear and you end up throwing them in the bin? Well these fortunately aren't like that! I really have to get to bed now!

Night all! xx

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SPOfficer · 24/11/2014 22:49

Wow what a great start iloverhubarb . Can't wait for next instalment. Like mono happy to sit this one out so you can develop your story unimpeded. Anyway I think my idea of introducing a zomromcom element to the story, along the lines of Shaun of the Dead wouldn't really fit with the vibe you've created!

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Rhubarb01 · 24/11/2014 22:52

Iloveblue working on it but grateful for more time for inspiration and lots of editing! Will attempt to post something by tomorrow afternoon, if possible. Liking the collaboration. I read a book once written by a man and a woman about a romance between a girl and a chap (she wrote the girl's story and he wrote the chap's). They wrote chapters alternately. Each chapter ended on a bit of a cliffhanger and the other had to take the story on. I think they each needed a week or so to write the next instalment, so we can probably improve on that. Yes also like Ilikerhubarb (and I do!)

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PassTheSherry · 24/11/2014 22:52

Helloo...de-lurking (I somehow managed to stay out of an entire thread! Mind you, was still enjoying the goings on from afar Smile). Just had to pop back in to say am enjoying the home grown fan fic so far!

Glad to see the thread is going as strong as ever.

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Rhubarb01 · 24/11/2014 22:54

It must be getting late. Iloverhubarb of course (and yes, I still do!)

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Ilovelblue · 24/11/2014 22:56

Reading this now in bed. I am thoroughly addicted! Welcome back NVM and PassTheSherry. We wondered where you'd gone!

Definitely switching the laptop off now!

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Rhubarb01 · 24/11/2014 22:59

Welcome back NVM and PTS. Just tell yourself that BA had no choice but to cancel because he was offered a career changing opportunity that he couldn't pass up and it will probably mean him appearing in uniform in some other film or long-running series thanks to a Hollywood TV exec or producer seeing OG. In the long run you will be glad for him!

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pixieg1rl · 24/11/2014 23:02

Oh can I hop in without spoiling the arc? Just a short bit as I'm typing on my phone and it makes my eyes go sqiffy.

Her lips pressed against his. God they felt good. Soft and warm with a promise that would make everything right. His heart beat faster as he mustered all his self control, gently raising his arms to Molly's shoulders and pushing her away.

"No Dawes" he whispered. "We can't, we have to wait out."

The look of hurt on her face nearly made a mockery of his words. Her eyes, still swollen from the tears she had shed in the hospital filled with tears once more. "Yes Boss."

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firegirl · 24/11/2014 23:03

NVM don't dump Ben! Give him another chance, Molly did!
Night ilove, you have convinced me to get the pants. And they will be a nice keepsake for me to remember these heady days. That's if decompression EVER sets in!

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firegirl · 24/11/2014 23:06

Well done pixiegirl, glad to see so many of you getting stuck in.

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icemist · 24/11/2014 23:09

Ooh, good paragraph pixie.

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SPOfficer · 24/11/2014 23:17

Oh bugger it. Got to have a go of this.

She slowly turned away and reluctantly headed for the door. He felt as if his very soul was being pulled from his body with each slow step she took away from him.

"Dawes, wait."

She turned quickly, those fathomless green eyes staring intensely into his. He almost lost himself in their depths, like a swimmer succumbing to a deep, warm ocean current.

"Be strong. There will be time enough when this is over. There are so many things I want to say, so much I want to share, but not now. Trust me... "

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