DD is 8 in year 4.
She's been given some homework where she has to edit a piece of text which has, I think been doctored by the teacher.
She has to "Get Rid of AND" and use better connectives.
She's been given a list of "useful Connectives".
Fine...all well and good... except it's not! Here is the passage as it appears on the sheet.
Mr Twit led Mrs Twit outside and he had everything ready for the great stretching and he had one hundred balloons with lots of strings and he had fixed an iron ring into the ground and he tied Mrs Twit's ankles to the iron ring and when that was done, he began filling the balloons with gas and each balloon was on a long string and when it was filled with gas, the balloon pulled up on its string and Mr Twit tied the ends of the strings to Mrs Twit's body.
The list of connectives is not compatible...it has words such as
However, nevertheless, though, yet, besides, anyway, after all, for instance, secondly, firstly, to begin with, therefore, as a result, then, meanwhile, later, afterwards.
DD can't seem to find words suitable...she has adjusted the text by dint of using different punctuation....adding full stops and commas where there were none along with the odd "then".
What have I missed? It seems difficult to add new connectives to this particular passage! I just let DD do it but it's not great.
Please or to access all these features
Please
or
to access all these features
Join our Primary Education forum to discuss starting school and helping your child get the most out of it.
Primary education
Anyone who is good with literacy...what do you make of this homework please?
4 replies
BigFatLegsInWoolyTIghts · 27/09/2012 20:31
OP posts:
Please create an account
To comment on this thread you need to create a Mumsnet account.