Reason for application - help - bit long

[naughtynoonoo]

Ok, I am applying to become a receptionist at the local school, about to finish the application and get it sent off. My sister and I have both written a paragraph or two as to why I want the job, but I can't decide which one to use, any ideas???

Mine

I am applying for the position of Receptionist as I have considerable experience in this area and feel confident that if given the opportunity I could make a valuable contribution to your School.

As you can see from my CV, I have over 14 years secretarial experience. The experience gained has given me an excellent understanding of the role of the receptionist, and the high level of professionalism required to deal with parents, pupils and visitors.

I am returning to work after taking time out to raise a young family. I have worked in School on a voluntary capacity since 2005 as a parent / helper. I have also been a member of the committee for Pre-School which opened in April 2007. My experience working as a parent / helper at School has shown that I am able to stay calm under challenging situations, and am good at working with children and teachers.

My work experience has demonstrated that I am a quick learner. I have used a variety of switchboards and telephone systems, and am confident using word processing, spreadsheet and database software programs. I am an experienced touch typist, with a speed of around 60wpm.

I was very attracted by your advertisement because I am keen to use my skills in a school environment.

I am flexible, organized, and would welcome the opportunity to work as part of a team to provide an excellent service for the school.

My Sisters

I am confident that I will be an asset to your school and would appreciate your reviewing the enclosed resume that depicts my characteristics and skills.

Accepting challenges is the foundation of my life experiences and something I do with confidence. You will find me a totally committed individual with pride in being direct, spontaneous and communicative. I can maintain records, perform numerical calculations with accuracy and I need little direction to complete assigned tasks.

From past experiences and education, I have acquired techniques that are needed to influence students, parents in making choices. My skills are developed and have allowed me to spontaneously interact with ethnic diverse populations and all age groups. I am a motivator and organizer and these skills have enabled me to effectively defuse problem situations with clients using tact. Teamwork is another skill I have acquired and one I know is necessary for organizational harmony. Over the years I have had to establish daily operational bases for projects/programs and provide direction to insure the progress and deadline were met.

I currently work in the classroom as a volunteer once a week

[LIZS]

Prefer yours on the whole but think your sister 's bit about ethnic diversity etc ticks a pc box of commitment to equal opportunties .

[pinkdelight]

I definitely think you should use yours. Your sister's is good, but is in a very different voice that is nothing like your own. Like LIZS says, it's worth adding a line in yours about being able to communicate across diverse age and ethnic groups. But say it in your own way. And it would flow better if you started with the line about being very attracted to the advert, then keep the rest as is.