Finally!

[charleepeters]

My mum and i have finally official got our website up and running so we can start our bussiness! please take a look and dont worry you dont have to buy anything!
www.herbalbubbles.co.uk

[charleepeters]

so what do you think? i knwo its not to professionl its quite basic at the mo but were a small family run company any feedback?

[Lonelymum]

Would you like some criticism? Can you take it? Please don't be offended, but I found three spelling mistakes on your home page and it would look much more professional if you corrected them:
enquiries
amazing
guaranteed.

(Sorry, I am a spelling freak and I am always noticing incorrect spelling wherever I go)

Otherwise, it looks very good and I wish you luck with the business.

[RTKangaMummy]

REMEBER! IF YOU CANT FIND A PRODUCT TO SUIT YOUR NEEDS WE CAN MAKE A SPECIALISED SOAP JUST FOR YOU! ALL YOU NEED TO DO

love the black and white bubbles

[hub2dee]

Lonelymum: You missed the biggy in the 'headline' - YOUR life...



Good luck with your business.

[charleepeters]

thanks changing spellings now!

[hunkermunker]

Looks good - but I think you probably accept paypal, etc - not except.

And I'd take the ! out of the middle of the last line of the first paragraph too

Good luck!

[hunkermunker]

On your enquiries link:

If you have any enquirys or a request please e.mail us and we will get back to you as soon as possib

change enquirys to enquiries and possib to possible

[hunkermunker]

And also "and we will" not "an we will"

I do this kind of thing for a living - yes, pedantry pays our mortgage

[hunkermunker]

On catalogue page:

Check all your donts and cants and change them to with apostrophes

forget, not for get

be able, not beable

deterrent, not deterant

occasions not occassions

[JoolsToo]

space after first para
Capital 'I'
enhance
space after ailments! (?)
New sentence? - Suitable for the most sensitive skin
Full stop after sensitive skin

[JoolsToo]

hm - see you changed your name this morning - what happened to 'sneaky'?

[hunkermunker]

Got fed up with people asking why I was sneaky

And worried I'd tarnish my good reputation - pmsl!

[JoolsToo]

[HappyDaddy]

The page may be basic for now but it tells us what you do and how we can get in touch, that's good enough. Good luck with it.

Hunker, are you a proofreader?

[charleepeters]

god im bad at this thanks you guys will do it now!

[JoolsToo]

InsomnIa

I think I would use 'scent' instead of 'smell' too

[hub2dee]

Wow.... look at these proof-readers go !!!!

Like a pack of friendly vultures !

hunker hugged me last night so I took away her sneakyness and made her nice again.

[charleepeters]

Well that took a while thanks for that i had no idea it had so many mistakes punctuation and spelling was never my strong point! anything else you find let me know thanks again i so hope this works out!

[Lonelymum]

Looks much better Charleepeters, but do note other people's comments and make those changes too.

Hunkermunker, can you get me a job as a proof reader? I am really good at it (despite missing the you instead of your on the home page!)

[Lonelymum]

Sorry posts crossed.

[fostermum]

thanks all for takeing the time to help us out and do let us know of any improvements you think we can do

[AnnieQ]

You've still got lots of missed apostrophes - its, cant, dont.

Forget is one word, not two.

Occasions doesn't have a double s.

Pregnancy isn't spelled pregancy.

The correct spelling of deterrent is ... well ... deterrent.

[debs26]

any chance of some photos on catalogue page? would be nice to see what finished soaps look like. might be worth listing basic scents aswell as ailments like rose petal, lavender etc. think people are more likely to pick and mix yummy smells than buy for ailments or skin type (if its for a gift you dont want something turning up saying this is for your dry skin!). personally i am more likely to buy something off a list than ask for it. apart from that i think its great, love the bubbles and its easy to navigate

[JoolsToo]

you've still not changed deterrent and Insomnia charleepeters!

[bubblerock]

Is the address Woodfeild or Woodfield? I'm on my second website for our Hotel in the space of a year and still not happy with it!