Tounge in Cheek mum blog looking for some feedback.. Please!

[DaisyOatham]

Hi all,

I have a rather tongue in cheek blog about parenting 2 young boys. If anyone has a space second and fancies a read, could you let me know your thoughts please? Would love some feedback.

whatyoudontexpectwhenyoureexpecting.com/

Thanks all x

[BF888]

I love the blog name! I’ve read a couple of the posts and will resume later (time for dinner) really enjoyable reads, with Witt that’s super relatable. You seem a natural at it!

[WireBrushAndDettolMaam]

Poor spelling and punctuation.

[StandingOvulation]

How can you be a "first time mum" when you've got more than one DC?

[TurningLeaves]

Awful spelling, punctuation and grammar stopped me reading beyond the third paragraph.

[DameXanaduBramble]

Sort your grammar etc out and it’s not a bad read - but nothing different to the millions of others out there. (Sorry)

[kittykatkitty]

You need someone to proof read before it goes on line

[Drabarni]

I didn't notice the grammar, but I'm not really your audience, and they are right, because they noticed it.
I think it looks inviting, clear and easy to navigate.
I like your informal witt, as I say, even though I'm not your audience.
Are there already a lot doing this as suggested?
If so, how can you make yours different, or stand out more?

[DaisyOatham]

Cor you guys don’t hold back thank you for the comments on the grammar etc. It is not my strong point at all so I will bare that in mind and try to get someone to proof read for me.

I started my blog as a first time mum hence the tagline. I didn’t even think about changing it but as it does not make sense I will update it - thanks for the feedback.

[DaisyOatham]

Thank you!! I’m glad someone enjoyed it at least

[GlubGlubGlub]

I’m sorry I just don’t see the appeal at all.

[DaisyOatham]

May I ask your age/situation? Just wondering who my audience are (or obviously aren’t!) Thank you.

[MayFayner]

I like it, I have boys 18 months apart although slightly older than yours THANK GOD

[redavocado]

I'm early 30s, mum to a toddler and I agree with the other comments. There are so many mum blogs out there and you need to really have something special to offer to stand out.

I made it about halfway through your Lego story - I think you're mad! I wouldn't have left them alone in the bath and I'd have been straight to A&E!

[hopeishere]

I read half the first one about Christmas. It's all a bit cliched.

Why are you doing a blog? If it's just for fun and you want to write - crack on. If it's to monetise then you need to rethink.

[DaisyOatham]

@redavocado Hi, I just want to reiterate that I was outside the door and could see + hear them at the time before anyone gets on my case. I’m really not one to panic with medical things, a Lego head up a bum isn’t an emergency to me ! Thank you for the feedback.

[Apileofballyhoo]

I just read the 2020. Aside from the grammar and punctuation, it feels very rushed - you're covering 5 or 6 weeks in that post as it mentions Advent chocolate to New Year. It's a bit disjointed, without flow. And it's not personal enough - I've no idea what ages the DC are, if you had a happy Christmas, if all the rushing sound was worth it, if you wish you never had kids at all.

It should be more like telling a story with humour rather than trying to be humorous about things that aren't.

It didn't make me want to read another post. All your posts should make the reader want to read another.

[juicey09]

I'm sorry but I didn't like it. The initials are annoying, I can't work out who is who, there's a J H and N, maybe if I read more I'd understand better but it didn't make me want to read more I'm afraid.

The stories just aren't funny.

Sorry!!!

[Mangaroo]

Reminds me of the Unmumsy Mum blog, I don't actually know if there are many other boy-mum blogs. I think there is an audience for it. I have noticed a sort of stereotype of British mums who have boys, I am not sure what it is but mums around me with those parameters have loads of similarities and your blog immediately resonated with that for me (the lego man post). So I would imagine that there is a community out there to whom your blog would appeal. Good luck with it!

I agree though with the PP who said that the initials are annoying, they disrupt the flow and suddenly make it very impersonal and thus unrelatable. Why not just use imaginary names?

[AdrenalineJunkieMummy]

I read one of your blogs ...never read a blog before it was entertaining...didn’t make me laugh but just enough to keep me reading. I felt apart from perhaps a few missing commas that your spelling & grammar were just fine. It’s like a diary entry for all to see, it got me thinking & distracted me from my boring afternoon. Keep doing it, you seem to like it & I'm sure it does the same for you 🙂

[gincaketeathatisme]

Well, I think your blog is very funny and definitely say keep it up. Blogging is like a hobby, practice makes perfect. Ignore the negative comments and take note of the constructive ones.

[WireBrushAndDettolMaam]

Ignore the negative comments and take note of the constructive ones.

OP specifically asked for feedback. if she wants to improve her blog then that means listening to the things people dislike about it.

[Heismyopendoor]

Read the Christmas post. Tbh, it didn’t seem very personal and was very cliched. I’m not into the whole alcohol thing so that doesn’t resonate with me. I probably wouldn’t read more.

[SmileyClare]

Impressed your son's nursery fishes Lego or similar out of nappies, washes and returns to owner. That made me laugh.
I liked how honest you were about your anxiety taking the dc out on your own. Showing some vulnerability will make your blog relatable. I think people see through situations which are told with great exaggeration for comic effect.
You have a good sense of humour so just keep it real and honest.

Not sure you could be successful enough to buy a large house outright, both retire and hire a nanny. Sorry if that's your dream