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earlgrey · 03/07/2006 06:27

Before Mass yesterday Fr McNab approached me and told me that someone I did the church flowers with died on Friday. She was only in her early 50s, and apparently only knew she was ill for 4 weeks. I've never written a sympathy card before. Would you comment on this for me please?

Dear P,

I was greatly saddened to hear at Mass yesterday morning of your terrible loss.

Although I didn't know H for very long, I always enjoyed her company whenever we met.

If there is anything at all I can do please let me know.

I just wanted you to know that I'm thinking of you at this sad time, and am praying for you both.

Regards,

C


It sounds rubbish to me. Any ideas how I can make it sound better? TIA

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loujay · 03/07/2006 06:41

I think this is perfect. Just the right tone. If I received this at such a time I would find it comforting.
Lou

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foundintranslation · 03/07/2006 06:42

It#s absolutely fine, earlgrey. Very sensitive.

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Miaou · 03/07/2006 07:20

Agree, it hits just the right tone

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earlgrey · 03/07/2006 07:22

Thank you all. I've written it now. X

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fairyjay · 03/07/2006 08:26

I think it sounds lovely.

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