My DD(9) asked for laptop to write a story. She loves writing and gets good reports from school regarding literacy.
Below is the first part of her story (I'm not 100% sure how long the finished product will be :) )
Can I ask if you think I'm being a tad PFB in thinking it's quite good?
Doves:
The further I stepped away from the situation my parents were arguing about, the sadder I felt inside.
My heart was pounding as I ran away into the open sky feeling free to do anything I desired. I ran to Swallows Nest to go to the cottage. No one dared to darken at the cottage; as rumours said it was haunted. I never believed them though.
At the cottage it was silent and peaceful. Not the sound of arguing and smashed windows. There at that moment was a tiny chirp. I had to know what it was. Suddenly I heard a flap and there, right at that spot a family of Doves circled ahead of me.
I ran up the hill and sat there on my knees watching the white sparkling Doves fly by. I loved that cooing sound that they made but they tend to head my direction. One Dove stared at me and flew too me and lay on my knee. I smiled and giggled as he pecked me and nibbled at my denim jacket.
The Dove and I watched the Swallows return to their nests but a hunter went and shot one of the Swallows! I couldn't help but cry. The Dove tried to make me giggle again by nibbling at my denim jacket but it just made me cry even more. As I wiped away my tears I got up and gave the Dove some of my water cress sandwich.
I decided to return home and leave a trail of water cress for the Dove to go back home to its family.
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In thinking this is actually not bad for a 9 yr old?
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nirish14 · 15/03/2014 23:52
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